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June 22, 2019 at 12:00 AM
Great so far; please update & finish soon!!
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February 3, 2016 at 12:00 AM
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September 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well, i have to say this even though it might hurt
your feelings. The grammar and spelling in your story
really was not that good. There were spelling mistakes
just about everywhere and repeated words. Some words
were even used out of context. And is this how you precieve
the InuYasha characters? Because they are way to OOC.
Especially Sesshomaru, He accepted Rin way too quickly. And
your chapters and lemon seem very rushed/ Also your chapters
are quite short.
I think you should try explaining your story more and giving
more detail as to what is heppening. Also i think you should
look into getting a beta reader, i think it will help your
story alot. Although your story is quite good and i enjoyed it,
it needs alot of fixing and revising. Althoguh throught the
chapters you improved your grammar and speeling alot, so that's
really good. But i still advise a beta reader, although i myself
do not have one. And i think in this story you should put it as
an Alternate Universe, since as they are not in the fuedal era
in your story. But other than that your story is good and i
think you should continue. Update Soon, i would love to see what
happens.
^_^ Ruka <3
your feelings. The grammar and spelling in your story
really was not that good. There were spelling mistakes
just about everywhere and repeated words. Some words
were even used out of context. And is this how you precieve
the InuYasha characters? Because they are way to OOC.
Especially Sesshomaru, He accepted Rin way too quickly. And
your chapters and lemon seem very rushed/ Also your chapters
are quite short.
I think you should try explaining your story more and giving
more detail as to what is heppening. Also i think you should
look into getting a beta reader, i think it will help your
story alot. Although your story is quite good and i enjoyed it,
it needs alot of fixing and revising. Althoguh throught the
chapters you improved your grammar and speeling alot, so that's
really good. But i still advise a beta reader, although i myself
do not have one. And i think in this story you should put it as
an Alternate Universe, since as they are not in the fuedal era
in your story. But other than that your story is good and i
think you should continue. Update Soon, i would love to see what
happens.
^_^ Ruka <3
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December 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow all of the characters are ooc' but i like it i can't wait for your next post to go up hopefully it won't take to long for you to post?
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June 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
please please finish this story it is amazing i cant wait to see how it ends!
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January 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Umm on chapter 14 ...i just thought you should know a woman cant test for pregnacy till shes been pregnat two to four weeks but its your story so ill let it slide
~Ja HoshiGiniro
~Ja HoshiGiniro
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November 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
very good please hurry and add more chaps....there fantastic,...
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July 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
awesome!
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July 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i love this story! it's really good and now i just want to know what will happen next!!!
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June 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love this story ALOT!!! Once in a while after i watch an inuyasha show makes me want to read this story all over again and again when ever i see sesshomaru, rin and jaken although i don't care about the little,green toad! You know i think if rin was older on the inuyasha show and sesshomaru fell in love with her they would make a REALLY CUTE COUPLE!!! So that's why i love reading "my cinderella"story. I hope you make a chapter 17 soon, cause i'm REALLY into this alot and i want to know what happens next. Let me if you get this review and maybe i'll give another review of what i think about the new chapters. BYE, BYE.