rate_review Reviews

That was one of the most beautiful things to travel from my eyes to my brain. The writing style was so fitting, so flowing, it feels like drinking something good and the sex had just the right combanation of steamy and sweet. You know, the thing that makes Jakotsu/Bankotsu one of my favorite pairings is the tragedy in it and which you've captured that flawlessly. The fact that both know their time together is limited but just want to enjoy it for as long as possible........"as long as you're mine."

I think I need a box of kleenex.

Anyways, you're a brilliant writer and have great taste in music (I'm downloading the song even as I type.) Big congratulations!

Very nice sex scene and story. You have an excellent style of writing. It's unfortunate that you don't get as many reviews as you want--and deserve--but requesting them sometimes annoys people and convinces them not to review, rather than the other way around.
Two little fastidious comments:

1. Limbs that move by themselves often sound odd in an otherwise active story--unless the limb movements are intentionally such. [from the Marshall Method of writing novels]
2. Calling eyes 'orbs' is just a little weird. Try another word. [From "Avoiding Mistakes in Fanfiction", guidelines on some fiction site]

You did an excellent job at not letting the song dominate your story. Anyway, now I'll go read your other stories. Great job on this one.

Wow!! You have such a descriptive style in your writing. Please continue writing. I thought that the song interwoven between the prose only heightened and enhanced the actual story. Very beautifully done, and keep up the good work. Thanks.

This is really great. I love the way it is written and the flow of the whole thing. Great job babe. ^^
Much Love,
~Mac~

That was very romantic

WOw, what a unique pairing. I really enjoyed this, and the song was beautiful and seemed to fit very well into the story line, my one complaint was that your writing style is so flowly, flowery, and beautiful, that is doesn't seem like wild hot dirty nasty sex, it seems like subdued loving sex. I don't know if you'll take that a an insult or a compliment I just had to tell you that was my only complaint.
The always perverted reviewer of under reviewed fics,
Nishi

awww... that was sweet. ^^ i dunno what you were talking about.. that was sweet. hehe.. sweet and cuddly. i loved it! lol. not that i doubted i wouldn't. :p like i told you before. *grins*