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July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
................................wow, cool story.:-)
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July 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow. The improvement over Blue Spring Skies is huge. Like the kind of improvement you'd only expect to come out of a Faustian contract. Grammar and spelling, too, immensely improved, except you still have one consistent problem: you always use "creating/created" whenever you mean "causing/caused". But regardless, amazing stuff. Good to see you're sticking with keeping the reader confused as hell. Seriously. If you can pull it off without annoying the reader (difficult to do, but so far I'm not annoyed in the least, just anxious, as I should be) then it makes the story all the more satisfying when pieces finally fall into place.
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July 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey that waz a very good story i hope u make mor like it omg when the started to have sex i waz like wtf i waz so happy iam happy for both of them i hope u make another one ok plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzdo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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July 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good fic...keep wrighting...why is he hurt...where are they going...it gets a 5 out of 5
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June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
the story is amazing. the way you write and the flow it has together is great! very well done! i'm reallly confused because of the change of pace and demeanor of the story but i'm sure that is to come so until then i shall wait ever so patiently. great story!
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June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
lovely work! the imagery was genius!! the creak of the door= a guillotine was just inspired. argh, i got shivers! At first, i was a little dissapointed as the story seemed to be developing via a trite and overused plotline. However, you pulled it off and made the familar seem fresh and exciting! well done!!
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June 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Really very good. Great job, please update quick I'd like to see how all this started/finished.(?) lol Anyway, yeah you got the cat to be curious! NOW KILL IT!
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June 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, depressing, but good! Make it happy mommy! No I'm just kidding. Good job!,
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June 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow...I mean...oh, WOW! I had read your first chapter a few days ago (I was too lazy to review, forgive me!). I was perfectly content with just that chapter. Sure, I was curious about why Inuyasha was injured. But, come on! It's INUYASHA! It's not like we've never seen him wound up in bandages before.
But this second chapter...wow...I hate to repeat myself, but it's all I can think to say! You have a real gift for imagery. I couldn't stop reading after the first paragraph and by the end I was just blown away. I am really looking forward to seeing where you are going with this story. Keep doing what you're doing (you are really good at it!) and I'll keep reading!
But this second chapter...wow...I hate to repeat myself, but it's all I can think to say! You have a real gift for imagery. I couldn't stop reading after the first paragraph and by the end I was just blown away. I am really looking forward to seeing where you are going with this story. Keep doing what you're doing (you are really good at it!) and I'll keep reading!
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June 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I don't think you need to apologize for leaving unanswered questions in the story. None of the unknowns are really vital to the focus of the story, and the story doesn't suffer from having some things unexplained. To the contrary, I think all the mystery adds to the mood. Generally speaking, I kind of like being thrust into the middle of a story and having to "fend for myself", so to speak, and it's usually how I write my own stories.