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June 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Alright I'll keep that in mind, and sure I can e-mail you when I get the next chapter out. Everyone doesn't seem to mind it all that much so I see no reason not to continue. All I ask is for more reviews!!!
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June 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow... I wish I had a mom like Kagome's! I like it- keep going! ^_^
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I'd say that you're off to a good start. The basic story was fine. Now embellish. Add more details to the story to stretch it and give the reader a little more to help them really get into the mood.
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thank-you both so much for the ideas. I was a bit unsure on which shoulder to place the mark on Kagome's shoulder, so that really helps. As for the ellaborations, I'll work on that. It never hurts to have constructive criticism. Thanks, oh and when I add chapter two, please review again!
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WWWWWWWWOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
KEEP GOING THIS IS GOOD YOU NEED TO KEEP GOING (JUST WANTED TO TELL YOU SOME ADVICE INUYASHA NEEDS TO MARK HER ON HER RIGHT COLLARBONE LIKE SINKING HIS TEETH AND DRAGGING IT DOWN 3 INCHES AND TO MAKE IT STAY PERMENANT)
KEEP GOING THIS IS GOOD YOU NEED TO KEEP GOING (JUST WANTED TO TELL YOU SOME ADVICE INUYASHA NEEDS TO MARK HER ON HER RIGHT COLLARBONE LIKE SINKING HIS TEETH AND DRAGGING IT DOWN 3 INCHES AND TO MAKE IT STAY PERMENANT)
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OH AND E-MAIL ME WHEN YOU UPDAT OKAY.
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June 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story was very nice. It was short and to the point and sometimes people really like that. :) I'm curious to see what else you come up with. Keep writing. :)
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June 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thank-you both for your feedback. I'll try to keep that in mind if I have enough time to continue it. If I get lucky I should have it updated in about 4 or 5 days. As for the hugging and kissing, I'll see if I can make it a bit better in that area, like I said, this was my first shot.
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June 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not bad for a first shot, it was exciting! It ended a little abruptly, coulda used a little huggn and kissn in the end haha but i liked it! Good job :)
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June 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wowness..... it would be cool to show how the group in the other time reacts to this. And a pregnacy would be cool.