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First off, good idea, it's different from the norm high school fic.

You started off on third person then jumped to the first person, I personally think this story would be better in the third person.

Sixteen and never having a girlfriend wouldn't make anyone think someone is having problems.... 19/20 is more that zone, but if you want Inu to stay younger so his father has control make him 18, theres still a six year gap and the maturity difference between men and women would make it more like eight years.

Your story has promise, don't let anyone discourage you, take mine and others constructive criticism to heart and use it to make yourself a better writer.

Looking forward to an update.

You need to put a warning in your summary that this story is about a pedophile.

not bad so far, what's next?

I'm so happy you updated so fast!! Please update again soon!

i liked the story, the only thing to maybe work on is chapter length.

Hehehehehe, this seems like good little piece of fanfiction, i'm game, please update soon... god, that was good, really funny.

I really like the start of your fic--I think it sounds very interesting ^_~ Don't let others rile you about the age thing--I think it sounds hot. I hope you really don't hold this story 'hostage' for reviews--and I don't mean to tick you off--but that's one of my least favorite things when reading a fic--are you writing this story for yourself, or just the number of reviews you can get? AFF is not known for its quantity of reviews, unfortunately. I think you story's worth a read and the premise is interesting--please don't make us wait too long before you update

This sounds like it might be a cute story. But I'd have to read more chapters to be sure.

wow this is very interesting i cant waite to see where you go with this UPDATE soon!