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well this chapter was quite amusing. the ideas of boredom for immortals at the beginning of the chap contrasted nicely with erin's dynamics at the end. erin's shyness and hesitance when she got down to irritating fortune was a nice touch. it showed that despite having planned to do that she could still have problems with it.
Waiting patiently for the next chapter.

nice chapter. I like how you are revealing information to Erin. She seems very human (which is good) because of her ignorance. I also liked how you had Sesshy sifting through memories ^-^ that was funny! Fortune's comments were just great comic relief! I am very interested to see how you are going to have Erin pit Sesshy and Fortune against eachother.

HA!

Oh, God. Two times I nearly feel out of my chair, while reading this chapter, Two.

I loved the imagery in this chapter, I really say Fortune making overly dramatic arm motions during his mourning of his 'friend.' Then I saw Sesshoumaru's lips twitch into a half second smirk. I also saw Sesshoumaru, in his human glamour whilst thinking.

I must say, the characterisation of Jaken was truely amazing. I believe he would have grown attached to Rin, too.


The thought just struck me, Erin isn't Rin's reincarnation, is she?

Wow. I haven't seen this side of Fortune before. I like it. I am really looking forward to a play, or even real fight between Sesshoumaru, and our favorite little Vampire.

Oh, and I'm not sure if I missed this detail somewhere, but does Sesshoumaru have both his arms?


Keep up the awesome story.

-Chris.

Yay, I liked the update. Haha, that was funny at the end with Rin ordering Jaken around everywhere. If I do say so myself, it is quite scary how little 14 year olds (or 12 year olds for that matter) can go into these scary fits that are worse then Sesshoumaru's fear of bugs! Hahaha. Update soon, I would highly appricate it. Keep up the good work! ^_^

TTFN! Ta Ta For Now!

Good chapter ^-^. I do like how you are drawing parallels between the past situation with rin and jaken, and the present situation with erin and fortune. fortune does seem to be plotting something at least a little coniving though ^-^. I cant wait to read more!

Hmm, good story, liekz teh humor, it's cool. Keep up the good work. *Pets teh Fortune*

wee! you updated ^-^. I liked this chapter a lot. Sesshomaru's little escape into the past/out and back again in five minutes moment was wonderful. I love that you had him throw a rock at Fortune's head... even if it was rather unintentional. And Fortune's jealousy was wonderful as well! Wee Bubba ^-^ lol. Did you change the girl's name from a previous chapter? It isn't bad or anything I just confused myself the first time i read Erin... Well the story looks good so far, it does look like your making it longer than you intended but that's alright by me. i like reading it ^-^.
good luck, have fun, and happy writings.

Buawahaha!

God lord. That was funny. Fortune acted just as I thought he would. Very...Well...Fortune-y.

Hmm. I don't know how I feela bout Erin tagging along. I was really enjoying the character developement that was happening when Sesshoumaru and the Vampire had their little banter. Maybe you could have Erin be a every other night type thing? >_>

By the way, I love Sesshoumaru having a 'roach phobia...It just seems right, in a twisted sort of way.

Keep up the great work.

Woo, nice chapter! Erin, I love that name. It's very pretty and I love the fact how Sesshoumaru was so content with having his hair touched by her. *squeals* I'm with Fortune on how Sesshoumaru seems so girly at times. Haha. And I have no idea why my e-mail didn't work. o_o;;; kawaiiinutenshi@aol.com *re-reads it several times* Yea, that's it... o_o;;; Do me a favor, and if that still doesn't work, try sending it to goldengalaxia@hotmail.com? Thank you very much, and keep up the awsome work!

TTFN! Ta Ta For Now!

(cockroaches.... xD I don't think I'll ever let Sess live that down....)