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Don't delete the story fool!

ah you wouldnt dare delete this story you cant you cant you cant i wont let you i think your story is good all i have to say is make the chapters longer and i will read it even if you dont but i want to know what you plan on doing to poor inuyasha and kagome dont listen to other people i want to read the rest of this story UPDATE PLEASE!

Ummm.....you have the worst spelling I have ever seen! Do you know what capital letters are? I mean maybe there's potential for this fic, but to make it really good you have to improve your spelling and your grammar. Just out of curiosity what grade are you in? Because I know you can't be 18! I mean come on! What 18 year old spells like that!? Don't take this as a flame. Its constructive criticism. It would behoove you to take some time a learn to spell.

longer and with more details... change some of the scenes, they dont need to fight all the time... but the plot is still ok so work on those and you'll have a decent story

Now there are a few big things every writer needs to do... 1. DETAILS, they make or break a story so try to use them to your advantage. with details the length of the story usually improves, so try to make the story longer. I think you need to revise the beginning cuz you just suddenly start out of the blue, the characters could be 10 for all we know... so elaborate and have fun. But I think you have a good plot just add details and it'll improve.

good story intersting plot but i think u have to make ur chapters a bit longer so than u dont have to update every day not that i would object so longer chapters and UPDATE SOON!

im loving it so far keep going especialy when kikyo and kagome started fighting bye *starts dancing*

yes yes you should keep going it sounds good plez keep going