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Chap. 7 - Another great chapter, but again, please spell and grammar check. There are also tense mistakes throughout the chapter (you used 'live' instead of 'life' in the very beginning and 'come' instead of 'came' later on). ...Maybe you should get a beta.

*sigh* Anyway,it's weird that you didn't go into detail about the 'pig-faced youkai' that had captured and tortured Sesshomaru, Inuyasha and Shippou. I guess he wasn't important? But the guys could have... I dunno, questioned him (or at least beat him until he gave them the answers they wanted). Though they are still a little battered, they can obviously fight. Oh well, no use crying over spilt milk (gaah I sound old).

Blah, this chapter was great, I hope you update soon and I'll continue reading. Ja mata~!!

~Animefreak242
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Kawaii Girl

Ch. 2 - This story is going great - loved the oxymoronic descriptions. I like the plot as well as the progression of the story itself. The somewhat brief overview was a good idea. Let us know what's going on Kagome's life without going into the painful details. This definitely has potential to be a favorite! ^_^ The only thing I'd suggest is proof reading (not with spell check though, some of the words were spelled correctly, they were just the wrong words - i.e. you used 'collage' instead of 'college').

Have I mentioned how much I love you for not making Inuyasha out to be a cold, uncaring bastard? *gives you a cookie* So you say this'll be a Sess/Kag? Maybe the look Sesshomaru gave Kagome as she faded was one of... worry? Compassion (though I hope not. A few weeks wouldn't be enough for his emotional constipation to go away)? *wonders*

Yay for Kagome going back to the past - to which the events leading up to were original!! *claps* I hope you haven't had anything too horrible happen to Inu-tachi. I think you've made time speed up a little though (guessing since Shippou's voice is so deep and it's only been 5 years for 'Gome). Sesshomaru and Shippou will definitely be on the other side somewhere... I wonder who else will be? Maybe Koga? Or Kirara?

In any case, this chapter was great. Please continue writing, and I'll keep reading. *wavies*

~Animefreak242
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Kawaii Girl

Ch. 6 - This is a great chapter, as were the ones before it. But I'm confused on one thing - your use of the word 'missive'. I'm not sure if thats the word you want to use, and it's a little annoying because I'm reading the sections that mention a 'missive' don't make sense to me. You said, "But there’s no time for that because I’m almost positive one of them is preparing the missive as we speak" (Kagome's statement from the previous chapter) and "The others not occupied by the missive shouted insults and degrading remarks at the dirty humans that stood in two lines...". Then you wrote, "The guard overlooking the missive nodded swiftly, not wishing to question his lord’s orders and hurried to open the gates". I was just wondering what you meant when using this term. Especially since it looks as if it'll be important in future chapters (you use it in reference to the traitors among them, which makes it seem like you're calling the group of soldiers a missive). Just wondering if you could clear that up for me.

--Missive(n): a written message addressed to a person or organization; "mailed an indignant letter to the editor"--

Other than that? Pretty good chapter. I am a little confused as to how they tranferred the energy to Kuro's son (I'm thinking it went from Kagome to Kuro to his son), but that doesn't really matter. I'm glad that everyone is safe now. Though I was hoping you wouldn't put them in such a situation, it makes the story more interresting. Nice foreshadowing too - speaking about how the journey to collect the shattered fragments of the Shikon was only a test; one that would prepare Kagome for the trials ahead.

Another thought: Kagome is Kisho's long lost (he didn't even know he had one) sister. Speaking of which, who was Kisho in love with? And how did she disappear? Also wondering who gave Kuro that sword... Well, I guess I'll find this out by reading the rest, huh? Ja mata~!

~Animefreak242
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Kawaii Girl

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

*sigh* Thank you. I needed that.

Thanks for the new chapter and i loved the begining.

great chap!, I think I've said it before but will say it again, thank you for maturing her personality becasue people do change as they get older and wiser and see more good and bad of the world, so many Inuyasha writers and fan fic in general forget that about chars

Cant wait to see kagome kick butt

yeepee! i thought u gave up..thank goodness u didn't!
can't wait for the next installment...

i was excited for your update , i really hope that sora girl is finally rid of, she must be strong for her potion really works on sesshomaru, great chap.

Wow. So much has happened. First the kiss, then off to war. Poor Iyashii is sent to the dungeon and that bitch Sora is still on the loose. The mystery around Kagome is killing me. I suspect things, but with your unexpected plot twists I'm probably wrong. So I shall wait. So Kagome is off to help fight? Great! I love when she kicks ass. Especially if Sesshomaru is by her side. The story is going great and I was glad to see an update. I know the drudgery of writer's block. I seem to be suffering a case of it myself. Dang it. Well, keep up the great work. I look forward to the next update!

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