rate_review Reviews

I really enjoyed this fic. I think you captured Kagome and Inuyasha's characters perfectly. This is one of the best-and most realistic- lemons I've read. I don't, however, think you needed to defend your fic. Anyone who is a true fan of Inuyasha could see this scenerio as very possible.

Wow! That was amazing. You captured the personalities of the characters really well, and have perfectly conveyed their feelings. You have a very few minor typos/mistakes but overall your story is very cleanly written -- which I very much appreciate. I really enjoyed reading it and I hope you write a sequel! Thanks for sharing your wonderful talent with us!

Wow. That was intense. I am impressed ... your story kept me glued to the screen for quite some time. I really could have continued to read this for ages ... so ... yes, I would love to read a sequel!! :)))

I, woah.
I almost cried when I thought that that had all be a dream.
That was amazing.
Please don't stop writing ever!

The word 'askance' has NOTHING to do with the word 'ask'. You have used it incorrectly.

'Askance' is a descriptive word which means to look at someone with suspicion or mistrust in your eyes. Example: "She looked askance at him when he claimed to be an honest monk."

Look it up on www.dictionary.com if you don't believe me.

Awww...thanks for the recommendation, HMPrune! With the way FF.net is set up, I hardly ever get a chance to respond to your wonderful reviews.

I'm very, very glad that this piece finally got published. It's been a few months since my first read on it, and it's just as moving the second, third and fourth time around.

I really enjoyed this & I'd love to see a sequal.

This story is really well written. The reader's heart, at least mine, really went out to Inuyasha. You can see some of his desire for acceptance in the manga and anime, and you did an awesome job showing how deep that desire really is. Way to go!!! Keep up the great work!

just wanted to write to say what a lovely written one shot you did. it was beautifully done, i personally agree with your thoughts towards inuyasha and kagome and
didn't see their chaaracters off a bit. this one shot would make for a great expansion on your idea, i for one would love to see you write more on it. keep up
the great work.
littleolmee

What a beautifully constructed yet realistic piece! I agree with your breakdown of Kagome's character and motivation in "helping" Inuyasha. You wrote everything in such detail that I didn't feel cheated that they didn't actually consummate their relationship at the end. While I'm a huge fan of the one-shot lemon, it seemed more natural and appropriate to have their first encounter revolve around teaching pleasure and exploring one another than starting a wild hanyou sex marathon :) I also loved how you were able to achieve a terrific balance for Inuyasha, allowing him to be both an innocent boy and hormonal man without making it seem too contradictory. Even Kagome's behavior, with her waxing and waning bravery as she "teaches" Inuyasha (and herself) about intimacy seemed in character, especially given your explanation of Japanese culture and their openness about sex. The most powerful stories, in my opinion, are the ones that combine terrific visual imagery with appropriate emotional content. And I feel that you did a wonderful job of blending those two...with the motivations for the characters' actions and their thought processes. Wonderful!