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are you going to continue this? i'd love it if you would!!

great story!! The characters do come on a little strong though but you must update!!! i won't be sleeping for nights over this!!!!! you must UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!

Chapter One:

Pant, pant, pant. That was so fucking hot! As always, awesome job. Can't wait for the next one!

Are finals over? Hope all is well over there.

Thanks,

Snowfall aka Hanyou Slave

Oh WOW!!!! Boy did I love this story. I know it's just a one-shot, and a terrific one at that,but this would make an awesome story.

Good spelling and grammar, as well as writing style. The plotline is innovative and intriguing - you certainly could make this into a chapter story quite easily. I do have a bone to pick about facts, though. Typically, people should either write what they know or research the topics. While you were for the most part accurate and convincing, there is no way any scene can be done in one take, much less a love scene. It's not about the performance of the actors, it's a matter of lighting. First, they do one take with the lighting set up for one actor, and then they reset the stage for a second take focusing on the other. Rinse and repeat for each additional actor. Not to mention that they move the cameras: for instance on one take they'll have a zoom in from angle A, and then in the second take they'll zoom out from angle A. If you were looking to extend the story, you might want to incorporate this into your story. But otherwise, great job and I look forward to your next fic.

Really good, but wouldn't they have been wearing g-strings?

Jesus Christ! That was soo good! I never thought anyone could do this scene without sounding unrealistic but....but you blew me away. I hope, by the end of this fic, Inuyasha will have her pregnant and marked or expecting their second child! Wow.

Hmnnn...everything about this fic seems so realistic and you portrayed a pregnant women quite well. Considering that I had to deal with my mother's constant rambling about nothing in particular and her weird mood swings for 18 months.

Yeah two kids. I'm the second oldest! And third from being the youngest.

But she didn't have a weird craving for grape juice and cheese slices. It was watermelon (that normally gets her constipated) and liver. It got to the point where I couldn't eat with her without turning green!

Anyways, please, please update soon!

ohmygod!! you just have to make a second chapter for this, please! this is amazing, i got goosebumps all over my body and that has only happened once before. and that was almost 3 years ago! oh please write a second chapter, please!!!! i know you said one-shot but please?!?

I love this fic!!!!! Please update soon!!!

Wow! It's hot in here!! *fans herself* I oove it! It's an original plot and even if the sex scene was not very long or very detailed, I liked it all the same ^^
Will you write more? Please!!!! ^O^