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for What A Girl Needs

by SoutasSister

person Darkchimera
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Umm.. ya sorry if I accidentally sent a blank review. I just wanted to say great start and I can't wait to see what happens next. So please update soon!
person Reviewer
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A good start. Let's see another chapter.
person Peacemaker
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The story is looking good so far and it has a good plot. I am confident that the story will be just fine as long as you take your time on the story and don't rush it. If you have time, I would appreciate it if you would update the story eventually.

Thanks Peacemaker
person Kellie
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ohhh, you left it on such a cliff hanger! I really look forward to the next chapter ^__^
person Rawben
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
whoa! this is your first story? it was really good! i'm excited for the next chapter! also, you've really set this up well for a san/mir lemon... come on! even if they are just on the side... :D ohhh... man, inu's gonna be so pissed if he finds that sess is goin for kagome. that'll be a fun confrontation...
person jodibetz
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that was an awful lot for a first chapter. It was really good. I hope you can continue this. And I am sooo relieved its an inu/kag :D
person fallenangel7583
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
VERY well done. holy crap that was well written. the emotions pouring off the screen in that were intense to say the least. i mean, it's like 2:40 am and i honestly was gonna go to bed like a half hour ago but saw this story and coudln't help myself. just wow. let me say this (i know i'm weird) but when i see good dialogue between characters, i can just about hear it being read aloud in my head, and let me say, i could just about feel the emotions off of that conversation. the whole time i was sure that inu was awake but hot damn, that is interesting. very well done indeed!!! your lines of “My mom put me on birth control a long time ago, Sango-chan. One look at Inuyasha was all it took.” was halarious. i laughed for a while off of that. (cause you so know its true). and poor inu...waking up to hear THAT part. now i guess it's time for him to talk to miroku, ne? hehe. that will be a good one. also a wonderful turn of events with Sango wanting Birth control and miroku falling over to the news. that was also a great one!
your story is going to be spectacular, i see it now. i really hope you continue with it. :-)

person Anon
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Articulate, original, and intriguing. Please do not keep us waiting long for the next chapter!
person spunki
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great start for the Story, can't wait for the next chapter !!
person KenYasha
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! I am impressed! Now that is a beginning to a story that I feel will keep me addicted for a long, long time. I haven't read something as good as that for a long time, and this is only the 1st chapter!
Great writing, great plot - please continue! I really look forward to read more of it!

... poor Inuyasha must have gotten a heart attack when he finally woke up to hear what Kagome did say ... whew ...