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person Dante
schedule September 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting, I wonder why this "deed" is...see ya next time.

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person Dante
schedule September 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice revision, keep going with this one. I really want to see how things end up.

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person Atocha
schedule September 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
DAMN THE CLIFFYS DAMN THEM TO HELL!!!
person Inus_Kagome_Forever
schedule September 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, it gets a LOT better everytime you revise it! Anyway, you really need to update soon so HURRY UP!

More soon please!
Inus_Kagome_Forever

p.s. tell me theres some lemon in there!
person demmaj
schedule April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ah, much better.
person Inus_Kagome_Forever
schedule April 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like your idea but I think you could add a little more detail and fix the spelling and/or grammar errors. After that you should be set. Its a really great story so don't stop writing. Update soon!

Inus_Kagome_Forever
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