rate_review Reviews

beautiful...there is nothing more to say

this is a great story so far I hope you write more it sounds like you have a very good plot for this story and I cant waite to read more of this fic

...but I had to stop reading about halfway through this oneshot. Inuyasha's behavior is a bit too OOC for me to bear. Primarily it's the crying that is really drawing me out of this oneshot.

Also, you have quite a few typos here and there. I suggest fixing them.

Nice very nice. I espicially liked the 'wimpering-kitten noises' line but you may want to double check the whole shirt thing. In some cases you have her fisting her hands in his haori but he looses his shirt in the begining so she should really be grabbing his hair. I like how you had Inuyasha all shy and such that is much like his true character. Good work!