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person senbo-sama
schedule December 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm...very interesting! ^-^ I like the whole concept and Sessie stalking his "prey" is very sexy but I found all the grammar mistakes very distracting. :\ I will admitt I'm a spelling/grammar freak but I think it might be distracting for a lot of people. ^^; May I beta read for you and fix it up a bit? :)
schedule November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was cool. you should have them find a woman that they want to mate.
would be cool. and more smut dun dun dun.........
person adry
schedule November 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please update as soon as possible your story is great!!!!!!
person glaze
schedule November 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hello come on now finish up your chapters the story is getting great lol......
person fire_an_ice
schedule June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMg so funn y alil ooc in the second chapie but hey that the beauty anyway i love it great story.
person Yamima
schedule May 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
MIROKU YOU LECHER DON'T YOU DARE PUT YOUR PITTED HAND ON HER!
person Rawben
schedule April 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
lol! whoa! was he out of it for that whole thing?? the first and second chapter??? lol! this is gonna be interesting! also, it was kinda difficult to understand who was who when you changed the POV... so maybe put in headers? that say sess pov or miroku pov? or somehting... anyhow, it took me awhile, but i figured out who was thinkin/talkin. ;) updates are love!
person BloodAndChocolate
schedule April 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oooh, the ending didn't sound good. A man? why should he be surprised? o.O Miroku isn't gonna lose a mate is he? Continue please, I MUST know what happen. ~Blood
person Anon
schedule April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
the pairing is fucking hot!! damm! wish i could join in!! keep writting!! ( do any other hot boys hook up) hint hint
person T
schedule April 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like it! ^^ lol I can't imagine going for a swim, then losing consciousness...only to wake up in someone's room! creeeepy! but..I guess if it's Sesshoumaru it wouldn't be AS scary XD...cute story! ^^