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I'm on chapter 4 of your story which is well written. However, you should have done some homework on the FBI. All I know about the FBI comes from watching the movie FEDs and X-Files yet I noticed inaccuracies which 10 minutes on the internet at WWW.FBI.gov could have avoided. The FBI does not use military titles like the police. Training is 17 weeks for new agents and prospective agents must be at least 23 and have a four year degree (This is possible for Kagome but you didn't say she had graduated). These inaccuracies detract from the flow of the story because the mind pauses and says "that doesn't seem right".

Also, my personal opinion is Kagome would not ride a motorcycle without a helmet if it wasn't an emergency and there were alternatives.

totally cool chappie, as usual!!! UPDATE SOON!!!

Great story!!!!!!!!!!.... It is actually the first police/FBI story I have yet to come across.... I really like it... A definite feel of X-Files and another type of show which -sigh- currently eludes me... I reallllllyyyyyy LIKE!!!! IT!!!!!!! please keep up the good work.... I feel a little better knowing there is at least a handful of writers out that still write Inuyasha/Kagome and Miroku/Sango fanfics.. I seem to see the current theme going on here as being non Rumiko made pairings... Since I am Inu... I will do a quick begging....... so sitting back on my hind legs-front paws clasped together in front waving in the air- a whimper comes out- Please update as you can... puppy eyes...

I have one word for you. MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!- thanks

u updated!!!! I am loving the storyline!!! *sobs silently for Rin* hope all works out good for Rin!!!

I laughed my but off when sango yelled "YOU HAD SEX!"
classic!! LMAO....im loving it. dont leave in suspense with the case though!

Gosh... it is 3 am, I am soooo tired but i just couldn't stop reading! Your story is so wonderful! I love the way Inu and Kag talk with each other and Sango and Miroku... ah... perfect! Your writing style is excellent! I only think that Sesshoumarou wasn't arrogant/elegant enough, his speaking was very casual. But hey, this is fiction, right? ;) It is YOUR Sesshoumarou... gosh, I wish he was mine... I adore that guy, hehehehe... Damn. Tiredness clouds my eyes and brain...
I am really looking forward to reading the next chapter!
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o_O wow. that was reallllllly good. and hot. really good and hot. hai. lol. excellent chapter and update. i love it. the characters you have stuck together with InuYasha and Kagome are soo solid that it is amazing; you haven't strayed from their depositions that you origionally cast them to, they are loveable and have some wonderful depths to them. i love your inuyasha, he's amazing. at first, i was tending to agree wiht your forward about the lemons being to soon (just cause tension is sooo much fun) then after reading the chapter, i completly agree...that wrote itself. wondeful, absoutely amazing. i can't wait to see what happens next. poor kag and sango's big mouth. eep? i just see inu taking a big sip of coffee before that one. crap. lol. hmm...adventures at the office? hehe. i can see this going great places. keep it up and fry naraku!!!! hehe.

*Rasies hand for kouga* *rasies hand for inu & kag*

Dude DONT LEAVE ME IN SUSPENSE!!!!

ahah I so felt bad for Kouga for that 2.5 seconds and there needs to be some steamy InuxKag sooon, ooh baby