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lol, so damn funny... cant wait for the next chapter!!!!! hopefully it'll be longer!... and citrusy...

update anytime soon?......

very good! yeah, i didnt get the whole joke that sango made, but the AN explained that. it's no big. but i love that inu ran out w/ a hard on. thats' hilarious!... keep goin!

woo! update update!!!!!!

If you would like to get a sample of my writting I am on Animespiral.com under flare4ever. I would love to double check your story and give you some input, but if not I will still love reading your story on AFF.net So I hope to hear from you soon.
michelle

pretty tame, but from what I read in the prolog things will be heating up very soon, I can't wait

Well, I wasn't to sure if this would sink or swim at the get go, but after a rather short prologue and waiting to see where you would go with things after the second chapter, I have to say that I am looking forward to more. You managed to pull off a good build up, and it looks like the ensuing chapters will be both humorous and filled with sexual tension- a great combination. You also did an even job of justifying Kagome's desire and forwardness. Too many authors just have them jump into bed, or have her be a sex kitten/ siren, right off the bat, totally throwing her out of character. You've done a believable job of creating motivation so that she doesn't seem "off." Also, good characterization on Inuyasha, Sango, and Miroku. Believable and true to form. I was especially impressed with your writing of Inuyasha and his slight romantic tendencies- he's not the overbearing, animalistic aggressor so many portray him as. Instead he seems more like the sexually innocent anime version of himself that has been molded by the era and his ostrasization from society. Keep up the good work. If the third chapter is any indication, you have the beginnings of what could be a well developed, interesting, and enjoyable fic.

very good story... I like it... Seducing the un-initiated hanyou... LOVE IT!!!!! Poor hanyou doesnt know what in Kamis name to do... Prephaps Kagome could maybe "accidentally" drop or leave behind in the open, well, partially hidden the sex-ed text book that is handed out in Japanese schools ( next to some ramen of course) .... Hint hint... giggles evilly... Also a quick language definition for you that you could use later on maybe.... Mokkori: the tent that is formed in clothing or bed sheets when a male is aroused ... snickers... Keep up the good work....

good job, i like the tone of the story with it humor it's meant to be silly and I like that you give Kagome a sex drive like a normal person would have S/M are so cute!

hi! aawww poor inu!!! I hope he gets some before he explodes lol!! i really love your story!!!! i hope u update soon, i can't wait to see what kagome does next for plan B!! bye bye!!