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February 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
nooooooo u take soooooooo long to update!!!plz no take a long time ths time plz...i love the pairings shippo/hiten...a new one thats fa sure
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December 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oooooookaay....where to begin?? you definatley show promise here, and it is a good plot idea, and i enjoyed reading it, HOWEVER it was kind of confusing. the way the characters acted, i mean, groping liket that...in a pool hall...in front iof their friends......so suddenly???? and im not just takling about inu and kag, either, when sang suddenly started running her fingers through mirokous hair...or whatever it was she did, i was a little confused by thsat as well. also i think that you have to much going on, and so little explanation. with shippo, and this gay guy....if you want to make a political(or whatever kind) stand, do it in a stroy more fitting for it, not just all of a sudden, adn in such a confusing way. i did like the idea of sesh as a stripper...lol, but the whoile thing with jukotsu and bankotsu...or whoever it was, (not good with those names) and sesh and inu????? it was WAAAAAY to confusing. this is NOT a flame. you can take it as one, and you can delete it , but it is not a flame. like i said your story definatley shows promise, and you have some reall good stuff going on here, but you also have a few wrinkles to iron out, and im just trying to offer my opinion in hopes that it helps you. i hope you will be able to understand that and not get all ridiculusley huffy about it, like so amny on this site. it is NOT a flame!
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November 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Your story is as wonderful as I remember. I've been to busy for quite sometime and unable to check an updates for the fics I read. I read up to date on this and think that you have a wonderful mind to create such works of written art. I hope you update soon. Yet again you display detailed work that paints the beautiful pictures of my mind. Update soon. EK!
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October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
DAMNNNNNNNN This is a GOOOOOOOD Story. Please continue!
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October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
DAMNNNNNNNN! This is a GOOOOOOOD Story. Please continue!
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October 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
why are you not updating so please do it
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October 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
~_^ I love your story!!!! Please Update soon!!!!!!!!!
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September 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter...lots of detail but it flowed well. Lots and lots of plot bunnies that could be developed in so many interesting ways...I can't wait to read the next chapter. Keep up the good work and thanks!
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September 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
can you please hurry and finish the story please
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September 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
honestly, i think the first two chapters were good. the latest ones get more boring by the minute.. i don't like the way you write anymore. ='(