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February 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love it tent are fine with me update soon
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February 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ah, interesting twist! I'm glad to see this updated, I went back and read the rest to remind me how blistering hot and great it is and now I'm left wanting so much more.
And for the tentacle vote? fjglkfd jgkjgkld YES.
And for the tentacle vote? fjglkfd jgkjgkld YES.
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February 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow. great stroy you have going here. I love it because it's so dark and yet believable in the contxt of canon. When will you update? I hope you do it soon. I can't wait for the next chapter. Your characterizations of every single chracter are spot on. All of their reactions and actions are in character to canon! and Kagome and Naraku are amazingly complex and intrincate. Then there's your overall writing style, which is almost poetic in a sense. I'm struck by your vast expanse of vocabulary, lol.
This story has seriously gotten me hooked, and I'm not usually one for these types of fics. Thanks for writing this and I hope you update soon. I think the best thing about your story is that it's original and immensely creative. You've portrayed the depth of Naraku's character perfectly- Onigumo's possessive lust, Naraku's own mixed personalities-and made the pairing plausible through that careful depiction.
As to future chapters, you've gotten a lot of requests about future plot, so I guess I'll make one as well. Please don't make Kagome pregnant. That would just kill everything. Many authors for naraku/kagome pairings or even rape! situations in general love to make the girl pregnant b/c it ties them to the father. That's just taking the easy way out of further characterization. Also, I think it would be fun for naraku to dangle kagome in front of inuyasha...just to show him what he's ignored all this time. lol. anyways, great story. I eagerly anticipate more! update soon!
This story has seriously gotten me hooked, and I'm not usually one for these types of fics. Thanks for writing this and I hope you update soon. I think the best thing about your story is that it's original and immensely creative. You've portrayed the depth of Naraku's character perfectly- Onigumo's possessive lust, Naraku's own mixed personalities-and made the pairing plausible through that careful depiction.
As to future chapters, you've gotten a lot of requests about future plot, so I guess I'll make one as well. Please don't make Kagome pregnant. That would just kill everything. Many authors for naraku/kagome pairings or even rape! situations in general love to make the girl pregnant b/c it ties them to the father. That's just taking the easy way out of further characterization. Also, I think it would be fun for naraku to dangle kagome in front of inuyasha...just to show him what he's ignored all this time. lol. anyways, great story. I eagerly anticipate more! update soon!
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January 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You are brillant! I love the Kagome/Naraku pairing. I mean technically he is not fully evil now because their essences have intertwined with each other. So this could have a happy ending, if Kagome is able to bring Naraku fully into the light? Please don't change it to Kagome falling for Inuyasha. I think Inuyasha should know what it feels like to lose Kagome. He still chose Kikyo for Kagome, even though, Kagome took her place. Yes Inuyasha needs to feel the lose of Kagome and realise what a beautiful person she was. I love how expressive your writing is. I wonder how Naraku is going to win her over? I mean she will not let him have her again but yet she is marked by him so it will be interesting to see where you take this. Maybe she will get pregnant which will bring out Naraku's vulnerability and protectiveness over her?
I love your story. It's very unique so please continue to write and I can't wait to see where you take this story!
I love your story. It's very unique so please continue to write and I can't wait to see where you take this story!
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January 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I loved your story, a lot.
I would love to see an ending where a subverted, black Kagome tries to kill Kikyo, but is struck down by Inuyasha, to see her pure soul ascending into the sky. That would be a fitting ending, methinks.
I would love to see an ending where a subverted, black Kagome tries to kill Kikyo, but is struck down by Inuyasha, to see her pure soul ascending into the sky. That would be a fitting ending, methinks.
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January 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
[To lazy to log in] I <3 this story! I can't wait until you review! ^^ I was in the mood for a good Naraku/Kagome fic and I clicked on the title and *BAM* I got it! Lol. Anywayz...I'll be waiting for your next update! ^_^
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December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i looove your story but i,ve been waiting for a long time for you to update and so is my friend that i introduced your story to sooo pleaseeee update its really good and its hard sometimes to find naraku and kagome fanfic that i like usually im a sesshy kind of person but you opened a new door for me so pretty please update soon.
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December 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
If you could see me ---and if I could do so without sending my laptop tumbling to its doom--- I would give you a standing ovation you brilliant person, you! This chapter displayed some exquisite writing and linguistic skills. Your ability to illustrate the most primal and visceral emotions is moving, and gives the reader the illusion that they are just beneath the skin of the characters you portray, feeling as they feel.
Also, as a rabid fan girl of the series, I was very pleased with your ability to keep everyone in character and still make things happen.
Bravo!!!
Also, as a rabid fan girl of the series, I was very pleased with your ability to keep everyone in character and still make things happen.
Bravo!!!
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December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 1
Uh, that was a mean ending. And a very ... well, dark chapter. Sounds ridiculous, since you warned the reader this would be dark. But dark isn't always dark. Sometimes violence is so overdone that the reader gets bored. Nothing boring here. Yeah, slicing Kikyo that way is violence. Reminded me of butchering (or was that only my imagination's doing?). But the real darkness, at least to me, is what goes on behind the actions. The thread of Naraku's simple presence and, of course, even more so of his words. *shivers*
But I'm hooked. Which is all the more surprising because usually I don't read dark fics. I just felt like Naraku/Kagome today, and reading the first paragraph of your story convinced me that you are able to write. Yes, I have to put it that way, because of the ten stories I read in the last hour yours is the only one that doesn't set my teeth on edge with poor grammar or poor writing. In other words: you write beautifully. ^-^
And I really really liked what I read. Very beautiful first descriptions of Naraku, emphasising his in-humanity. Throughout the story, the descriptions were of a kind that made it very clear to the reader what he is and what he's not: a demon, a predator, a creature of chaos and destruction. Very well done!
Kagome is also spot-on! The belief Inu Yasha will save her in time, that things aren't as bad as they look, the indignant anger at Naraku's actions - that's so Kagome!
And now I will shut up and go read the second chapter. *shivers in anticipation of drakness*
Uh, that was a mean ending. And a very ... well, dark chapter. Sounds ridiculous, since you warned the reader this would be dark. But dark isn't always dark. Sometimes violence is so overdone that the reader gets bored. Nothing boring here. Yeah, slicing Kikyo that way is violence. Reminded me of butchering (or was that only my imagination's doing?). But the real darkness, at least to me, is what goes on behind the actions. The thread of Naraku's simple presence and, of course, even more so of his words. *shivers*
But I'm hooked. Which is all the more surprising because usually I don't read dark fics. I just felt like Naraku/Kagome today, and reading the first paragraph of your story convinced me that you are able to write. Yes, I have to put it that way, because of the ten stories I read in the last hour yours is the only one that doesn't set my teeth on edge with poor grammar or poor writing. In other words: you write beautifully. ^-^
And I really really liked what I read. Very beautiful first descriptions of Naraku, emphasising his in-humanity. Throughout the story, the descriptions were of a kind that made it very clear to the reader what he is and what he's not: a demon, a predator, a creature of chaos and destruction. Very well done!
Kagome is also spot-on! The belief Inu Yasha will save her in time, that things aren't as bad as they look, the indignant anger at Naraku's actions - that's so Kagome!
And now I will shut up and go read the second chapter. *shivers in anticipation of drakness*
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December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 3
Evil evil Naraku! That drug is sure the best way to break her without too much physical damage. And I'm sure he will tell he that it was all herself, that the drug merely encouraged her to unciver her deepest feelings. That's the evilest and most brutal form of violence, isn't it, the messing with a fragile mind. *shudders*
Very well-written. On the surface it seemed such a nice lemon, and then you remember the situation she's in and ... whoa.
This was indeed a cliffy. Just when the hold of the drug was broken. Oh, I shiver thinking what Naraku will do now. *hurries to click Next Chapter*
Evil evil Naraku! That drug is sure the best way to break her without too much physical damage. And I'm sure he will tell he that it was all herself, that the drug merely encouraged her to unciver her deepest feelings. That's the evilest and most brutal form of violence, isn't it, the messing with a fragile mind. *shudders*
Very well-written. On the surface it seemed such a nice lemon, and then you remember the situation she's in and ... whoa.
This was indeed a cliffy. Just when the hold of the drug was broken. Oh, I shiver thinking what Naraku will do now. *hurries to click Next Chapter*