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February 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I definitely think you should go for the lemon. I really liked chapter ten, and yet another interruption by Sango!! Urg, if I were Kagome... I would be a very angry anf frustrated girl.
Nice work thus far, as you know. Keep it HOT.
Nice work thus far, as you know. Keep it HOT.
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February 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
VERY good story, nicely put together with excellent story flow, all in all: Excellent work BUT there was one error in that last chapter:
I don't know if you wrote it on purpose or not but a hanyou is not "Half-demon, Half-Youkai" it's "Half-human, Half-Youkai" Because Youkai and Demon are the same thing except on different language, this is not an insult or anything but did you write that on purpose?
I don't know if you wrote it on purpose or not but a hanyou is not "Half-demon, Half-Youkai" it's "Half-human, Half-Youkai" Because Youkai and Demon are the same thing except on different language, this is not an insult or anything but did you write that on purpose?
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February 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I haven't reviewed this since the first chapter, but it's definitely only getting better with each chapter. I must say I was disappointed with Sango's interruption at the end of the evening, but what can you do? True to the anime and manga, someone alwyas interrupts InuYasha and Kagome. I really like it. Keep it HOT!
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February 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Nice chapter. I cant wait to read the next one sooo....PLEASE UPDATE!!!
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February 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story is awesome!
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February 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awsome story just a few spelling errors im at the edge of my seat im DYING 2 read more plz plzplz update soon ^_^
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February 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OH THE DRAMA!!!! great story, but i think if you spell "tomOrrow" "tomArrow"one more time i'll have to go yell in a pillow. think of the poor pillow!! I found a few more spelling errors, but i dont really blame you for making them because even if you spell-check there can still be misteaks(hint:spell-check does NOT pick up grammatical errors)You should always have someone read it, if you read over it you will ignore the misteaks because you already know what's supposed to be there. If you cant fine another person to read it, try reading every word from the end back.I' looking forward to the next chapter so update soon!
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February 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hola, this story is awesome! I am glad you explained the demon-thing, because I was already wondering... I really like this story and I am looking forward to reading more updates!
CU
Silver
CU
Silver
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February 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I can't wait till Inuyasha puts Koga in his place. I mean come on, enough is enough. Can't wait till their dancing. Later.
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February 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
the story plot you have here is excellent. i like the charater depiction you have put together for Kagome, being stronger then she normally is and much less...whiny. i like it. we could use a little more detail for InuYasha's past but what you have set up for him already is great. i love the two of them being stuck together as dance partners. i get flashes of 'Dirty Dancing' scenes in my mind when i think of that...and that out-weighs the thought of our favorite red clad hanyou trying to dance. LOL. things i would love to see....LOL. great story so far. i find it intresting that you used Bankotsu and Jakotsu for the bad guys on the plane. (i love them both, they are teh best). keep it up.