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uh oh, Naraku is not a nice enemy and he has his eyes on Kagome! I can't wait to see what will happen!

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wow...great updates. i can't believe i missed like the last six chapters being uploaded, but hey, it was pleasent reading. definatly an intresting story you have wound together here. i love the characterizations you have set together...and shippo...geez...that little hentia. LOL. and poor Sango...she really needs more Miroku to break her away from yelling at Kags. and you brought in fluffles...which is great just cause he is. (does anyone else get bothered that he talks in third person...bugs the crap out of me, honestly). anyway, great updates and your doing wonderful in your writing talents...BTW, great lemons...really really good ones. i'm impressed. keep it up!

Thanks!!!!(for updating) Update as soon as you can!!!!! Cant wait for next chapter.

Your doing good. I liked the lemons and hope you have more plot for us soon. Later.

Nice!!!! Keep up with the excellent work.PLEASE!!!!! Update as soon as you can...but...dont kill yourself!!!! Good luck with the essay ;)

This is good. A little fast in the pace, but that's fine. The plot is growing and I hope to see more soon. Just a piece of advice. It is some what confusing to have all dialogue in the same paragraph of different people. Each dialogue line should stand on it's own. Here's an example from your story.

They made their way to his car. "What the hell to you want?" Inuyasha barked out (no pun intended). "Watch your tongue half breed. I'm here to let you know he’s back for the company.” Inuyasha stood dumbstruck for a moment. "WHAT?"

Now see how it looks in the proper format.

They made their way to his car. "What the hell to you want?" Inuyasha barked out (no pun intended).

"Watch your tongue half breed. I'm here to let you know he’s back for the company.”

Inuyasha stood dumbstruck for a moment. "WHAT?"


You don't need to follow each dialogue with "he said, she said". Or with anything. Take a look at some other stories out there. I have a few on ff.net and mediaminer.org. Hope this helps you out. If you would like someone to beta test you chapters, just post that in an A/N. I am sure someone will respond. Later.

ARRRRRRRRGHHHHHHHH ::frustration::

I liked Kouga getting his ass kicked for interfering. I kinda wanted Sango to at least get a punch from Kagome. I mean come on, she ruined a potentially great night! Meh... it was still awesome. I wanna know who it is that has InuYasha so upset! Wahhhh, the anticipation! Urg, keep it HOT! Sayonara

I really reading this story I hope you up date soon.

Don't worry it went well for your first lemon....it was kind of funny when Sango interrupt...jejeje....poor Inu. Keep it up update SOON!!!!

Darn, I wonder why Inu didn't throw the bloody phone out of the window! I would have done it!!!! Hehehehe... Love your story!
CU in the next chapter!
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