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for Alone

by Kittycat69

schedule July 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is for anon's comment

It is true that i make mistakes so that's y i keep reading it to see what else i need to fix, hopefully ill get better but iv'e just begun writing stories. Thank u for the comment thought, hope to see u again. Bye

P.S. sometimes it's annoying to fix some sentences because then u have to re-do the whole page sometimes, but ill get the hang of it :)
person anon
schedule June 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
interesting story, but you definitely need some work on your grammar and syntax. examples....parish should be perish....where should be were, and we're in a few places. and the sentence 'but still very close then they normally are'...thats not even a sentence, and then should be than. needs some revisions, and a beta with a working knowledge of english and grammar.
person essie
schedule February 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ok I'll bee waiting
person Anon
schedule February 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Inuyasha-22 (after 50 years of no aging I would assume he would be that old.)
Inuyasha had to have been at least 17ish before he was sealed to the tree, so really he would be 67-ish. Just because he was sealed to the tree, doesn't mean he didn't age. If you saw the third movie, Sesshomaru looked exactly as he does now, on the day Inuyasha was born...
person essie
schedule February 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this is great update