schedule
May 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You need spacing. Thats one huge eye sore of a paragraph. Its otherwise not bad.
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It will do wonders
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It will do wonders
schedule
February 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Is it just me or does this story seem along like Hentai Jane's Lap Dance? Hmm?
schedule
February 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I suggest you breaking up the giant paragraph into smaller paragraphs to make it better to read.