AFF Fiction Portal
person Gyousei
schedule April 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
just some nice friendly constructive critism... don't mix japanese and english in a story, the best stories are usually all one language, you can never be sure just how much knowledge your readers have in other languages and it breaks the flow of the writing as well, it gets too confusing. Maybe you should try it again in just english, your story sounds like a good idea and I'd like to read it without it being bilingual, I speak four languages, I know how annoying interspersed tranlation can be, this isn't a flame, don't feel bad, I'm just trying to help. ^__^
schedule February 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
lmfao i snet myself a review to feel good LMFAO!
schedule February 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
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