rate_review Reviews

I think your grammar and style are excellent!! I had no idea you weren't a native to the English language!

I really like your story and I know I am being picky here but I must point out that you have used the word "mustered" incorrectly more than once. To "pass muster" means to pass inspection or to be judged favorably, but "muster" does not mean to inspect someone. "Muster" means to gather people together for a purpose, such as "muster the troops".

I'm not sure why you think "mustered" means to look at someone or study them, but it does not. I'm sorry to point this out but it is really bugging me and you write so well that this incorrect word usage just stood out.

Please check www.dictionary.com or a print dictionary if you don't think I'm correct.

Otherwise, I love your story and I hope to read more soon! Thanks!

HI!, I think your grammer and spelling is pretty good! Heck! its better than mine when Iwrite fanfiction, and English is my 1st language! Ironic huh? well anyways, the story so far is pretty interesting. Keep writing kay?

Now I really know you want to kill me....why? why me? I've been waiting for you to update in an almost patient way!!!! SO PLEASE UPDATE SOON Im REALLY INTERESTED IN THIS STORY!!!!!! If I already mention it I'll repeat it..you have a great talent keep up with the excellent work ;)

hey there. came across this after updating a fic of mine, and i have to say it's pretty good. now, i'll warn you, i've only read THE FIRST CHAPTER. so that's all i'm talking about.

but i like what i see.

okay, the downsides to your prose thus far: you ramble a lot and have lots of run-on sentences, among other things. but, i think that if you team up with a beta reader whose native language IS English (if you haven't already), then i think this fic can be even better than it already is. there's just some misuse of commas, apostrophes, and whatnot that really bother me.

also, the fic title is really... cheesy... oh, and please don't kill me for saying that. maybe if you kept it simply to "A Parallel Dimensional Fairytale"? then again, you have no obligation to take my advice *nods firmly*


anyway, i'll drop by later with reviews after reading the remaining chapters you've got up here.


Numisma

PLEASE, PLEASE!!!!!!! you are killing me... I need to read more chapters. I would be very very happy if....YOU UPDATE SOON!!!!! Thanks.

Please, please, please!!!!!! UPDATE SOON!!!!!!. Its cool just to imagin how will they look in other dimensions.

I think is really interesting the way you develop the story. I really, really loved it so please keep up the good work and UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!! ME ENCANTA!!!

Hey! I'm goin to guess that you are from France. Or maybe...Spain? Portugal? Anyways, I would have never thought that English wasn't your first language! You are doing great! Keep it up. This story is kind of wierd, like I didn't know what was going on, but that's okay. It keeps me thinking and I'll definatly keep reading so I can find out what's going on.

I like it so far and I hope you update soon. Thanks!