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yay birth scene!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! keep it up!!

Hey, If you can't handle constructive criticism then you need to stop writing. I won't admit that you are a writer. I said before you have really good ideas that can make awesome stories if you only took the time to show you actually care about your work. It's not about updating as fast as you can but more about making sure that you would be proud to show your work to people. I mean obviously you have no problem with your work otherwise it wouldn't be published on the internet for all to see. I'm just finding it a little hard to believe that you are trying as hard as you can to write since it seems like you can write a decent responce to my review. You're right, I don't have to read your story. I actually didn't. All I could stomach was 1 chapter of 'Heaven Meets Hell' before I had to stop reading. I almost thought, 'Hey everyone is intitled to have one badly worded story, maybe this is her first one' I was shut up when I saw it wasn't your first story. It was the way you write all your stories.

If you really feel you can't write anymore and you must bitch and whine in your stories to get your readers to agree with you, then your just looking for attention. All I said was take your fictions off this site and re-think them. They all have very good plots and just from reading the summaries you can see that they can be great stories. You just have to either take a college level writing class where someone can teach you make the reader feel like they are in the scene not reading something that consist only of conversation or lack of. I mean having your characters scream and whine ever five seconds is a little annoying. Poeple need structure.

Just at least try to keep the damn characters in character! I mean I understand your stories are AU but come on you can at least make an effort. If you need some good examples of how to write a good story here are some:
ABCs and LSD : http://adultfan.nexcess.net/aff/story.php?no=544172324
The Youkai and the Exterminator: http://adultfan.nexcess.net/aff/story.php?no=33349

Read them. Notice how there is more description then talking. It give the story atmosphere like I said before. I really hope you don't just brush this off as a flame and ignore what I'm saying. If you want more people to read, you really should take what I say seriously. It will get you alot more reviews then 'OMG WRITE MORE NOW PLZ!!'

I want you to stop writing stories. I'm being 100% honest here. You write stories like a 4 year old draws, you just write whatever comes to your head without really forming any structure to the story. The sad part about this is your summaries are very good, but the stories, they suck! I'm sorry to say it. Take all your stories off of AFF,net and rethink them. They could be so much better but you ruin them with all the teenage humor. Why don't you actually stop and write some atmosphre in the story then put conversation.

Yes hi its me writing. Gee your so nice to put that in a mean way best advice ever. Listen if you do not like my stories then don't read them, I'm not forcing you or anything. I like to write, thats my business, and everyone else doesn't seem to mind reading my stories. You seemed to be having the problem. You know that advise was very harsh. If your gonna act like a prick when reading anyones stories then heres my advise keep ur fucking mouth shut. I'm sorry but I hate when someone does that. I apologies to everyone. I am not taking it out on any of you, only this person. I may not be the best writer in the world, like some of the best writer on aff.net but I at least am trying, and what about you oh so great one? I don't see any stories from you. Listen because I am only saying this once, don't read anything from me again. Simple as that. No reviews from u, nothing. So piss off!!!!!!!!!! Kisses catt. -_-

YAY CATT!!! u tell em off fuckin prick judging u....i lik ur stories catt keep it up ^__^ and remember dont care what otha ppl say..they just wannna put other people down 2 feel better bout themselves >.