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for The Sins of the Father

by whirleeq

person deep serenity
schedule May 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I still say that you should make whatever pairing you want, they can have romance with out sex(and now girls her age do have boyfriend, and sex'though they shouldn't')

I like but this story is getting to confusing and complicated for me, while I know you are setting it up for lots of twists and suprised right now while nothing is explained it makes it jumbled(to me) All these char,(veiled) in the past and present just popping up Yuki have drugs, then a fake hojo giving her more drugs of a type...I don't know sometimes if you crowd a story with to many twists the base plot and story gets lost.

as always your writing is well done though
person Coffee Gyrl
schedule May 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love the sound effects you put in this esspically when Kenshin bites Kagome I've seen too many fics that don't show that this actually hurts! I love the humor as always and that Kagome is still very impish this is so cute of her. I really can't wait untill Kouga/Hiko and Kenshin and Kags meet up, talk about dega vu her wolf and half breed fighting over her again Bwuahaha. Also this is different in that it's Ken's old teacher man this is going to be good. This is great but I'm wondering what the heck is Yuki thinking (or not thinking). When you say strange dark kimono is wearing something totally inaporprate (gods I can't spell)? What is she going to tell Sano when she gets out 'hey did you see a good for nothing red head take off with my mom' or will it even occur to her to hide the fact that she's from the future or to tell Sano what she knows about all of this. I love Sano's reaction to demons still and that Yahiko is taking this all so much in stride I'm sensing some major teasing and head knawing for poor Sano. I'm curious if you're going to have Kenshin and Sano do what they usually do when they seriously disagree and duke it out. Usually Kenshin just knocks some sense in Sano's think skull but since he doesn't have his demon blood bound yet that may get dangerous.

:bows humbly before the queen of all hentai crossovers and makes offerings of baileys:

Everything is amazing as always looking forward to the next update:)
person Audrey
schedule April 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Just read Chapter 21 and I love that last line! "WICKED!!"

Great storyline there, but Sano with stars? Any luck we'll see some Oniwaban around too? Can't wait for the next chapter!
person KuwaLove
schedule April 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter! He was so close, yet so far! Hahaha. Oh Kenshin and Kouga will be interesting to see together...hahaha..Kagome might need to do many sits to Kenshin hahahaha...oh someone will be in trouble if one's mother finds out! Hahahaha. Please update soon.
person Atropa
schedule April 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A chapter worth waiting for I say...
You are truly a wonderful author....!!
person DEEP SERENITY
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
CHAP 12- was great! LOL Ken will learn that Kagome is no push over where fighting is concerned and yeah the pup arrived! Just in time to get into trouble!

great job
person Jasmine Fields
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ROFL!!! Oh dear, what's a Sano suppose to do? lol. *wipes tears from eyes*
Loved that chapter!

-Jazz-
person Coffee Gyrl
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Brillant as always darling you always blow me away with every chapter. I liked that Kag's shoved Kenshin out of the way that was quite intertaining. Hmmm and that whole kiss'n thing let me just say Homona homona homona wwwwhoooeeee THAT WAS HOT. :fans self: Finally some action! I love Sano's thoughts on this it's so real that he would be mad at Kenshin and angry at Kagome I really like this. And I love how he keeps trying to talk himself out of the demon thing I mean if someone saw demons today I can easily imagine a similar response. And the whole Kenshin finally getting the change of pace to be looking 'down' into someone's eyes this was so great. :flops over happily:
person Veronica
schedule April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey that was cool. I don't think I've ever read a simple kiss that had me hanging on the edge of my seat before. i couldn't read fast enough! This is fast becoming my very favorite fic, and that says a lot, because I normally hate crossovers with a passion. This one, however, I gave a try because of the reviews, and I'm glad that I did. I like the idea of Kenshin and Kagome. Please keep the updates coming!
schedule April 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*burns coffee scented candles at the altar of updated fanfics and leaves an offering of marshmallow mocha, chocolate biscotti, Baily's Irish Cream and favorite sexy wallpapers of cute anime boys with long swords* ;)