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Next chapter pleaz I'm dying here

sorry kouga... you lost!! inuyasha was always meant to be for sesshomaru!!!!

and kouga can't do anything///sesshomaru would beat him to death...in no time!!!! after all...there's no comparison....

...poor koga..he lost his mate-to-be!!!


........but, as i'm a big fan of sesshy, i love that inu is sesshy's forever!!!!


and to think of that stupid wold to try to steal inu from sesshy... sesshy is stronger than him so it's natural to say that koga is going down!!

A very good story but... HEY where's the rest of it!? ;) Keep writing.

I know that in fanfiction you can write things how you want them to go instead of how they might really, and we are in a fandom that deals with demons in ancient japan so suspension of disbelif is kind of a given. As well as, I realize, that with out adversity there is no growth, that defines a well told story, right? Many fanfic authors use the painful event followed by a rescue or help recovering and dealing with it, and this is a valid plotline, however I think it trivializes both the reality of rape and the characters traumitization by it to have them turn around and be fine with intimate contact right after it happens. If you want to do a sex scene a couple hours later then wouldn't a NEAR rape be just as effective? The feelings of helplessness and violation are similar without being scarring in the long term, it's much more believable that the comforting and kindness in that situation could turn to amorous activities as the rapee demands reasurence that all contact is not harmfull, yet is still unscarred enough to actually allow the contact to happen. Please forgive if this is offensive, I was just wondering, esp because the rape fiction seems to be very popular in this fandom.

I loved it write more chapters!!!!

you should really space them paragraphs.. its really hard on the eyes * blinks*

This is a really great story. I was so happy to see that you had updated. Your first lemon was really good. It was tender and hot. The only thing that would have improved it would have been if you'd had this beta'd properly. There are still a lot of mistakes and the formatting needs to be corrected along with separating your paragraphs. But aside from the beta'ing issue, your writing is creative and spot on! I would be happy to beta for you if you would like. This is just such a wonderfully thought out story but would read so much better with some corrections. Good luck. And I can't wait for the Koga/Sess confrontation. That should be fun, lol. Poor Inu, how rough he has it with a handsome wolf and a beautiful InuYouki Lord wanting to love him up, reallllly goood. ^_^ Tough situation for Inu, lol. I wish I had problems like that ^_~ Feel free to email me if you'd like me to edit your next chapter or your previous chapters.

Stupid review board hidding my email cause I wasn't signed in, lol. Here's my email just in case. lovingkoga@yahoo.com

Why Does Sesshomaru live in a cave?