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by Murasaki

person Kinnara
schedule July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, it seems interesting, so far. (I'm on chapter 4) But, I'll have to finish it, now!
person Caitriona
schedule April 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
As I read through this fic I had many thoughts. I did like it, I really did. I just thought that it was a little TOO angsty. The story leads the reader from pain to pain in a glory of tears until all one sees is the blinding light of an ending filled with the love of two mature and healing adults. You have done a good job if this was your intention.

Some things that I especially liked include:
1 Sess's keeping of an orphanage and his inability, for a while, to treat Kagome as a true equal adult because he didn't know how to deal with anyone except children.
2 The ending with the reincarnated Kikyo and Inuyasha
3 Shippo's affection for his 'father.'

Some things I didn't like all that well:
1 You bring in a past affection with Miroku and even bring in his reincarnation, but don't show much of that past affection.
2 Sango?
3 You sometimes use an Angst sword +3 when a simple +1 would have worked wonderfully


All in all, though, a good fic. Thanks for an enjoyable evening reading fanfiction.

Caitriona
person reiki
schedule April 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great story, though the beginning was a bit confusing. keep it up!
person Trish
schedule December 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This story was awesome!!! I was completely into it...i felt everyone of the emotions i cried with kagome......But still I LOVED IT!!!!!!
person sexililkagome
schedule December 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ooo cool story write more Ja-Ne!