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Oh, I'm gonna go ahead and guess what Grimm fairytale this is... (I just realised after the last chapter or so that the summary says "Grimm." -_-) Uhm...Is it The Goose Girl? I read some Grimm stories and this one seems to fit your own the best.

Ciao, Sayonara, Goodbye, Farewell, Alhoha, Au Revoir, Ja ne, and any other ways and laguages that you can say "goodbye" in, just so I can appear inventive and creative. ^_^;;

Chap. 2 - *shivers* That's just... God. I actually feel sorry for Naraku (though I'd feel more sorry, if the possession wasn't his fault). But it's weird how you had him marry Kikyo. Most authors have Naraku and Kagura wed and Kikyo be a sister or cousin to Kagome. I like that you've made your story slightly different. Plus side: Kagome won't have to go through this alone. Poor thing. So sheltered and spoiled... She doesn't know anything about the real world.

Well, the father wanting to marry and have children with his own daughter thing is creepy, though not completely foreign. I'd actually be more accepting of it if Naraku only had to marry Kagome (no sex - incest is NOT cool). Then again, I shouldn't be so disgusted. This kind of thing was pretty popular back in the 1600's when everyone was ruled by monarchs. So sad. Though it does explain why everyone was so ugly. *laughs*

I like this sory so far. Just hoping you get Kagome out of there soon.

~Animefreak242
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Kawaii Girl

Poor Kagome. Even though I undersand his role and you said you like like Koga, I don't like his part in this story. Koga's obsessive and annoying sometimes, but he's not a bad character. He wouldn't be used to rape anyone. *pets Koga-kun*

You said that Inuyasha dislikes Naraku, but why? Is it because of the way he treats his people? Or did Inuyasha used to know Kikyo? Were they involved? Is that why Kagome's scent seems familiar to him? I wonder...

Well, I'll continue reading. No more almost rapes, ok? They're killing the mood. Random Q: Is Shippou going to be in this story? Or will he come later, when Kagome opens up more?

Why do you type O_O afer every chapter? Shocked at your own words?

GAAAH!!! *goes to rinse my mouth out with bleach* I'm mad that Kagome's so naiive. After the first time your father tried to french kiss you, you should leave. Actually, after Naraku threatened Kagome in her bedroom for a 'proper thanks', she should have taken the hint for what it was and run. Now he can't control the darkness anymore and when he runs, he'll be right on her heels. Hopefully you'll give Kagome about a day of a head start (or at least half a day). And thank you for making Kagura good. Too many authors make her so evil (even if she is a blood thirsty backstabbing bitch).

My question is where did you get the idea for this story from? I really hope it came from a movie or TV show and not your own imagination. *worried*

Again, I really like this story (as twisted as it is). It kind of grabs you. *nods* Gotta read more. --Just so you know, I'm blaming you if I don't do my Business Management assingment.--

~Animefreak242
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Kawaii Girl

Edit: Forgot this was based on a fairy tale ^^;;;;;;;; What Grimm tale is this story based on? I don't think I've read it. The only ones I'm familiar with are Red Riding Hood, The Three Bears, Rumpulstilskin (sp), Jack and Jill and the Disney movies (Beauty and the Beast, The Little Mermaid, Alladin, Mulan, Cinderella, etc. - though I think Mulan is based on of a true story). In any case, I'd like to read it... See where your story differentiates from Grimm's.

I LOVE IT!!!

I love this story. Seriously! I have read this folk legend in a couple of incarnations, and I have always loved it regardless of the variances you always get with folk tales. Your adaptation of this old story is marvelous, and I love how you put it together with the InuYasha characters. You were very true to the characters (though Koga isn't THAT much of an ass) and I have reread over and over the details from the old story you put into it. I am in awe of you, and very jealous that I didn't think of it first. Naraku is -perfect- in the role you placed him in, and the relationship with Kikyo and Kagome is very well done, eerily resembling both the original InuYasha plot, and the old story, yet with all your own flavour to it. I love what you did with Kagura and her relationship with Naraku and Sesshomaru. Your representation of Sesshomaru is one of the very best I have ever read. Seriously, it is! You managed to keep him totally in character(which is a neat trick with Sesshomaru, believe me I know) and InuYasha is very much in character as well. The last chapter I read was where he made good on his threst to tie her to the bed. I am very, very interested in finding out what happens next, since this is relatively new territory you're delving into with regards to the plot similarities. I'm confident that InuYasha will prevail, and the Western Lands will not fall to Naraku, but just how badly are they going to get hurt first? Will Hiten be killed? Will Koga get the chance to redeem himself?
I am all aquiver with anticipation. Please, if you would be so kind as to email me when you next update, I would love you even more than I already do.

=D i've been having a sorta down day... but this made me so happy! i check back and WHOOSH! another chapter! xD this one was good. =P keep uppity da bestest work! =] hahaha. k... i'm sorta hyper now... >____+ i can't wait to know what sesshoumaru and inuyasha will do to stop naraku. dun dun DUN dun..... =D i shall be waiting!

^^ you updated~~! pleaz write more! ill be waiting,

your loyal reader/reviewer
Fuzzy~~

that was awesome please write more or i'll die