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hi, quite a great story u have here since i'm a "fan" of sess/rin romance. well wont mind those incorrect spellings though.aniway keep up e gud work, lookin forward to see wad's upcoming for them.

Great chapter ....much better...still a few spelling problems, but don't worry about it ....it was great!!!!!!I can't wait to read the next chapter......

Your story is still good, just please follow my suggestions....you still have spelling that is not correct, and a few grammar issues. I can't wait to see who Meilie is????? and what kind of maid is Yuri?... Only thing she can say is " Oh we'll figure it out in the morning."....It was really funny......Update soon

eh..to choppy. didnt flow. nice ideas tho

I love any Rin and Sesshomaru story.....You have a very good start so far, just a few you should work on ....First, spell check your work, you have a lot of misspelling in your piece. Second, add more dialogue between the characters let them tell the story and your narrate the reader into their emotions, and other places. Now I'm by no means a great writer, but I think if you use my suggestions your story will improve greatly. I would still like to read more so please update when you can, and I hope you don't think I'm putting you down.