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June 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hm, well see, the Japanese doesn't express anything better, it just confuses everyone who doesn't speak Japanese..and probably those who do, too, because you can't arrange japanese sentences in the same way as english ones, which you did. It's okay to throw in a couple of japanese words that aren't important to the plot and that most people know anyway, i.e. baka, onna, kuso, etcetera, but try to refrain from putting in whole sentences of Japanese, and especially combining japanese and english together. Like if ich start sprechen things in Deustch with nein real reason, it's just annoying. I'm sure a lot of readers passed up your story because they didn't want to have to scroll back and forth just to figure out was going on. So work on that, k?
Hope I helped,
Ami Maxwell-chan
Hope I helped,
Ami Maxwell-chan
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May 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
it will really help if you don't write in japanese, cause technecally everything should be in jap then and then no one will understand, even as it is its hard to understand and i can't read a fic while scrolling to the bottom trying to figure what they are saying >.< please write in English! (and your jap's grammar isn't that great either, I can understand most of the words but ... the grammar just screws me up and ... please write in jap only when you're sure it's right ...)
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May 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
and your jap's grammar isn't that great either, I can understand most of the words but ... the grammar just screws me up and ... please write in jap only when you're sure it's right ... the jap dialogue made about no sense
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May 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
i really like the story, and the Japanese words u put into the first chapter.
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May 19, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Really I wouldn't sugget mixing two languages like that period. Peppering in a word or two from one language is okay if the setting calls for it. But that really killed the fic. I couldn't undand and it and don't care to read up on the side notes...try an all english version maybe?
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May 9, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Ok, I don't normally do this, but:
What on earth made you think it was a good idea to use japanese words!? This is an English fanfic, I couldn't read any of the dialogue ;_; And that's pretty sad, considering I'm bilingual. If you're going to use Japanese words, use the RIGHT ones. The names weren't even translated right. And to be honest, you shouldn't be using any Japanese words when your audience is all English-speaking. If you want to use Japanese terms, write it in Japanese.
What on earth made you think it was a good idea to use japanese words!? This is an English fanfic, I couldn't read any of the dialogue ;_; And that's pretty sad, considering I'm bilingual. If you're going to use Japanese words, use the RIGHT ones. The names weren't even translated right. And to be honest, you shouldn't be using any Japanese words when your audience is all English-speaking. If you want to use Japanese terms, write it in Japanese.
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May 5, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Naughty little brat! Not as much japanese. Other than that it is perfect.