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for Fragments of Broken Pride

by Areitus

person Nina
schedule May 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Tis sis such a great story. I'm really enjoying it. Poor Rin. I hope she at least gets her sight back. That was a little harsh, but then Naraku is a stone cold bastard. I like the way you have Inu and Sess slowly reconciling. Nice job. But don't forget about those lemons now.
person Catchfire
schedule May 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Please please don't stop writing. I just love these three together and your story is the best one I've seen yet. Look at your injured foot as an excuse to sit at the computer a really long time writing. Just make sure you take advil regularly to keep the pain level and swelling down. Hope your better soon.
person Oishi
schedule May 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Applause for DRAMA, keep up the the tension. Thought that maybe it was alittle too early for Seesh ouchouch IY's cheek, but that doesn't ruin it for me. Hope your next update is soon!!!!!!
person krystle
schedule May 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I really liked it and i ct wat wait to see what happens next!!!!!!!!
person youkai_sesshoumaru
schedule May 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
thanks for all the positive reviews everyone ^-^ I shall continue to write more as soon as i think of something ^.^; eh-heh...
person ladykaa28
schedule May 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ok now I can see the whole Kagome/Sess thing starting. Now just some for the Inu/Sess thing to start and it will be perfect.I can see thginnginning of it with the two of them.. Are you going to write a part in about how this will effect Rin? She is a part of Sess's life and with two new people so to speak coming into the relationship that they share this will effect her in some kind of way. Shippou will be in the same situation. The both of them have lost their family and look to the inu brothers as fathers and Kagome as a mother (well Shippou does). It was just some thing that occured to me when I was reading this. Oh I forgot I like this fic very much.
person hello there
schedule May 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ouch, broken feet suck. A good story, update soon, when your foot is better.
person golden
schedule May 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ooohhh!!!! I love this fic!!! It's so much fun to read and it is so dramatic!!!! Wee!!!!!!!! ^_^ You must wrmoremore!!! Yes more more more more more!!! Wee!!!! *spins around in her computer chair* WEE!!!!! Otays! Can't wait until ya update again! And I feel sorry for ya ;-; I've never hurt ma foot... So I really donno how you feel, but however it feels, I hope you feel better soon!!!! *huggles* Otays, I shaeaveeave ya alone now. Feel better soon!!!
person Kittie-Nova
schedule May 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great story so far! I can't wait to read more! Keep up the good work, and I hope you update again soon!
person Someone Out There
schedule May 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Loved your chapter (4). Maybe after you write the chapter, you might also save it under .hmtl It doesn't indent but it spaces paragraphs. I had trouble too in the beginning, but I use this and it works ok for me. Anyway... thought you brought everything nicely through with a goodw, ew, even the rape scene. Sometimes you don't plan on things in a story, but then sometimes as you're writing things lead into a different course than you expected. I do HOPE that the story remains as how prideful, mean Sesshoumaru (don't get me wrong, I love him too) continues to develope into more of the brother and 'friend' of the others. You are the author and the story is your idea of how you want it, but I just hope this doesn't turn out to be a 'betray the hanyou' Sess/Kag story. I like the idea of his broken pride being how his character gets changed -- kind of like your doing now and I love it! I like fic with Sess getting to be a 'decent' demon-person. Please keep up the nice work. I'll be checking in to read you later....