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Peally good story. I normally don't like OCs but Kya is really well done and believable. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.

Hey there i love this story. it is really interesting. the only thing that is bugging me that you go over what each charcter is going over at each moment. you souldn't do that. if you want your readers to know what was going on in the moment then either leave it as a flash back. if you want them to go over what they felt then summ it up, if you want give a effect to the readers then give detail but only on someparts. if you do it to all of then it will make the reader become bored. i must tell you that chapter 24 i started to get bore that i had to skip some of the chapters 'cause you had already explained it- oh thats another thing. you don't want to explain things more then two times expecially in detail, its gets tirings to the eye. please keep this in mind i'm not degrading you your story, i'm trying to help you see some points that you keep in count when puting out a chapter. you want to make sure that the story becomes interesting to mind. i love how the whole story is, it is just my eyes get tired when you repeat the same thing. i must also say that i was waiting for Naraku to come out and kiddnapp Kya, and something happens like either naraku absores her or puts her in a deep sleep or even cause her to forget everything and make her fight on his side. but now as im starting to write this i guess that Inuyasha would need to be more deeply in love with her, or even mated for that to give out a good effect to your readers. well, update more soon. i would love to read more soon. Thanks.

Ja-Ne =^_^=

PLEASE UPDATE PLEAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSE!!!!! i LOVE IT DO MORE. yOU KNOW I HATE INUYASHA KAGOME PAIRRINGS I LIKE ALTERNATE PAIRRINGS LIKE AYAME INUYASHA OR KAGURA INUYASHA THOSE ARE THE BEST ESPECIALLY THE CHAPTER STORIES PLEASE DO SOME OF THOSE.THIS FIC IS GREAT I LOVE IT SO FAR

I love it its awesome update soon man and can you please do a ayame inuyasha chapter story there are only a few of those and make it good to all the ones i reed they didnt have sex. make it in the past if you do it this is a challenge make it ayame joins the inu group and they slowly fall for eachother.

UPDATE AS FAST AS U CAN PLZ I LOV UR WRITIN SO MUCH WENS INUYASHA AN KAY GONNA FAL IN LOVE I HAV TO KNIOW!!!!!!!11

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO Y HAVENT U UPDATED!!!!!!???????

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OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OH MY GOD!!!!! YOU UPDATED OOOOO NICE LEMON GOT ME FEELN RANDY ehehehhehehe your so good girl youd make a good writer lady well keep it going dudet I AM CHEERING YOU ON BOOYEAH WOOHOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?

I love it ur are such a good writer keeep going. WHERE IS THE LEMON MAN?!?!?!? LOL make it in the next if its not too much :p i am such a hippy bye bye ill check up on you soon!!!!!!