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May 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i luv your story:)
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May 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*dances like a loon* w00t!!! YaY update YaY update!!!
Thank you Thank you Thank you... I had thought that I had reviewed your story before now but it doesnt appear so. I'm sorry I havnt reviewed sooner. But I love both "When Two Paths Collide" and "When Two Paths Entwine" you have actually brought tears to my eyes with this one. With all the moving and confussion going on here, its wonderful to see updates of my favorite stories once again.
Thank you for sharing and I look forward to reading s'more.
Thank you Thank you Thank you... I had thought that I had reviewed your story before now but it doesnt appear so. I'm sorry I havnt reviewed sooner. But I love both "When Two Paths Collide" and "When Two Paths Entwine" you have actually brought tears to my eyes with this one. With all the moving and confussion going on here, its wonderful to see updates of my favorite stories once again.
Thank you for sharing and I look forward to reading s'more.
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January 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I was browsing through the recommended reading of another recommended story, and stumbled across this. That seems to be the only way I read IY fanfics anymore. I almost didn't follow the link, and now I am really glad I did.
There are soooo many questions! Where is Kagome? when will Sess find out? is Yura the sneaky shadow? What is wrong with Ryu? What is Arin's secret? What is up with Onigumu? Will Cyn and "blue eyes" hook up? What is up with Kagome's powers/crystal/charm? Does the strong attraction between Kagome n Sesshoumaru have anything to do with their powers? Is Kagura the "spy" placed at Naruku's company? (I could keep going! hehehe!) No, I don't want you to answer them, I want you to write them! I prefer to read as the story unfold than to be spoiled.
Ok, onto the contructive critique. Very interesting plot with lots of good twists and turns. Very hot lemons. Good characterization, although Sess is ooc for his typical persona, this is an AU and a lot of the facts are changed, (gotta love the freedom of fanfiction!) I just LOVE the way you write him, which is oft times not the case in AU for me. All in all, the characters are captivating and realistic, and I find that the OC's are interesting too, you integrated them well into the story. I did notice mistakes here or there, a word that was missing, like you may have rewritten a sentance and forgotten "to" for example, nothing major. I think I saw maybe a dozen mistakes in the whole story, so as I said really minor. Besides that none of us are pro's. Tense... I'm bad with tenses, so I can't critique on that. eh eh eh. Good use of punctuation, maybe a typo here or there like an extra comma or a forgotten one, again nothing major. So all in all I would say that this story rocks! I am disappointed when I got to the end of chapter 12, I wanted to read more. Alas, I wouldn't have gone to bed like I should, so I suppose it is a good thing! hehe.
Keep up the good work Babs!
Your new fan
Tsukashi
There are soooo many questions! Where is Kagome? when will Sess find out? is Yura the sneaky shadow? What is wrong with Ryu? What is Arin's secret? What is up with Onigumu? Will Cyn and "blue eyes" hook up? What is up with Kagome's powers/crystal/charm? Does the strong attraction between Kagome n Sesshoumaru have anything to do with their powers? Is Kagura the "spy" placed at Naruku's company? (I could keep going! hehehe!) No, I don't want you to answer them, I want you to write them! I prefer to read as the story unfold than to be spoiled.
Ok, onto the contructive critique. Very interesting plot with lots of good twists and turns. Very hot lemons. Good characterization, although Sess is ooc for his typical persona, this is an AU and a lot of the facts are changed, (gotta love the freedom of fanfiction!) I just LOVE the way you write him, which is oft times not the case in AU for me. All in all, the characters are captivating and realistic, and I find that the OC's are interesting too, you integrated them well into the story. I did notice mistakes here or there, a word that was missing, like you may have rewritten a sentance and forgotten "to" for example, nothing major. I think I saw maybe a dozen mistakes in the whole story, so as I said really minor. Besides that none of us are pro's. Tense... I'm bad with tenses, so I can't critique on that. eh eh eh. Good use of punctuation, maybe a typo here or there like an extra comma or a forgotten one, again nothing major. So all in all I would say that this story rocks! I am disappointed when I got to the end of chapter 12, I wanted to read more. Alas, I wouldn't have gone to bed like I should, so I suppose it is a good thing! hehe.
Keep up the good work Babs!
Your new fan
Tsukashi
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December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey, what is up with the cliff hanger? This chapter was great, I know what is going to happen next! Just playing. But I think I have a good idea. Please update soon, hopefully we can have it before the holiday get her? Pleassssse! (Pout) And I can not wait till you start back on The Mysric Scroll! Happy Holidays!
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December 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please write more!
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December 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i love your story! please update soon
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November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Howdy, That was great, the plot thickens and I'm so confused! Please write more soon!!! :) I'll be not-so-patiently waiting :-D
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November 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey i liked this chapter but i thought that you were finally going to let him find out. Oh the suspense. Hope you update soon n when r u finally going to let him find out about his son.
Amaya
Amaya
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November 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
GREAT chapter, really good plot but I absolutely adore how you seem to easily switch from circonstances. Excellent style of writing soon and I can't help but to ask you to update this story as soon as you can, of course. The combination that you made between romance and action is wonderful and the love scenes are just delicious, but what I found more remarquable is your way of gradually developing the events without rushing anything, it really gives the reader time to connect with the characters and be more aware of what is happening, and held there breath at the same time wishing to know what the future unholds. I also absolutely love the fact that Kikyo is portrayed as a kind, helpful person. It makes the story more original ,and also we are able to identify and connect with a different persona of the character.
Update soon!
Update soon!
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November 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey you,finally you updated
God what is wrong with Ryu...is he getting some youkai characteristics and Kagome will have no choice but to come clean with sesshou...oh wow cant wait for your next chapter...
I love your story
God what is wrong with Ryu...is he getting some youkai characteristics and Kagome will have no choice but to come clean with sesshou...oh wow cant wait for your next chapter...
I love your story