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for Stronger

by Fairia13

person Mattimeo
schedule March 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Pretty good fanfic. Lots of romance and lemons, good sex scenes. Paticularly liked Miroku having dozens of kids, seems like exaclty his fate. Overall rather well done. Your guess at how Naraku would be destroyed was pretty good too.

However I do have a few complaints.
1) Sesshoumaru forgiving Lady Alina and her general. It just didn't seem him. He always struck me as more the type to fip hearts out on a whim. I can't see him being even remotely reasonable about their offense. I mean, even if killing her would mean war, Sesshoumaru would likely happily take the entire Cat demon tribe on by himself, fully expecting to win, and would probably do just that. And their "punishment" was really soft.
2) Rin's escape, I mean Inuyasha is a half demon and he can run faster then a horse, and sent people from miles away. Sesshoumaru and his most elite trackers ought to be able to catch up with a mortal on a horse. It really wasn't a plausible escape. I might have excepted somthing like say, Ah-Un flying Rin off (with the expalnation that he can fly faster than any other Youkai can follow) setting her down in a remote location, and then leaving her behind to create false leads, or somthing like that. But I have a hard time believing a human could escape from the worlds strongest demonlord that easily.
3) A number of people notice Sesshoumaru's inner turmoil, yet he is the king of outward calm. I can accept Rin noticing it, but the others is kinda a stretch.

Besides that though, it was a very good fanfic, that showed alot of effort put into it.
person Taaliba320
schedule March 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Lovely story. The only thing that annoyed me was your continual usage of 'peruse' instead of 'persue.' One of those annoying spelling mistakes that spellcheck refuses to catch, I know, but I thought I'd tell you since it's almost impossible to catch such things in your own work. Ta.

-Taal
person phoenix
schedule March 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
absoutely loved this story so sad that it ended, will there be a sequel? well looking forward to other's stories of yours.
person DPM
schedule February 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love this story and had hung from the first word to the very last sentence. You've done an outstanding in this creation. You should be proud !!! Do continue to write more.
person Colshalin (not signed in)
schedule February 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YAAAAAAY! I was just so glad to see this happy ending!! This story is the absolute BEST, and I can't wait to see Amaya! Thanks so much for involving me in some proof reading at the end. I was honored to offer my opinions, and if you ever need another pair of eyes during the writing of Amaya, I'll be glad to help. I told you how MUCH I love sneak peeks! LoL
person New Fan
schedule February 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. You are a one of the choosen few authors that will take the time to read their work. They are works out there I will not waste my time to
read,but I will not write nasty reviews. I do not know what people want read in a story, but if they do not like your story, then they should write their own damn stories. I really dislike how they can put their two-cent on your work, but do not give sound advice on how to improve. Just ignore those fools and tell them get their head out of their @ss and leave you alone. I love your story honey. Keep writing.
person HauntedReality
schedule February 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Fairia, I just finished the final chapter and epilouge and wow. I am going to start by just telling you how impressed I am by your word smithing in this story overall, but especially in the last chapter. The way you crafted the sentences as well as the way you constructed the architecture of this chapter was magnificent. Throughout this fiction you developed and created many interesting characters, but I really appreciated the way you limited the main action to those who, in my opinion, were the most important. While at the same time giving a nod to all the other characters so they didn't just seem abandoned. Naturally, I have loved Atoki consistently through this journey, and I think his presence in this ending chapter was important because he was so pivotal in the first chapters. Also, the inclusion of Kohaku was very important because of how close he had become to Rin in the last year. But I was especially pleased that the bulk of this chapter focused on Rin and Sesshoumaru, both seperately and together. I think their "talk" through the mindlink was a nice touch earlier in the chapter and allowed Rin to think about how some of this was her fault too for not allowing herself to love fully. Granted, I don't think either of them is really at "fault," but it was clear they each had things they needed to work out for themselves, and I liked the way you explained that and showed them making progress without tying everything up tightly. This was a story about life and life doesn't simply end at the end of a page, and I think you were able to display that for the reader. There is a sense that their life together is just beginning. Oh, I also loved Kimi's interaction with Sesshoumaru. If I remember correctly she is going to be in the sequel? I think it was a nice set up for the depth of her character. I also really loved the way Sesshoumaru said he wasn't worthy of Rin, but that he did deserve to hear that from her. It was very poignant. Another favorite place was at the end when Sesshoumaru offered to let Rin dissolve the mating if she so chose. I think this was very reminicent of the time Sesshoumaru knocked out the monks and told her she could choose to follow him. I believe you made this parallel on purpose, but either way I thought it was a nice tie in. All in all, I would say it was a banner ending for your first fanfic.
person Crissy
schedule February 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
After reading all the turmoil, the angst, the ending was lackluster. Where was Sesshoumaru's reunion with his son? To leave an ending that short, unfulfilling is a travesty and shows the true meaning of the story was lost somewhere in the middle and the half assed attempt at an ending is so disrespectful to readers who took time to read this crap.
person Flor
schedule February 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was wonderfoul!!!!!
I hope you will write a sequel because i still want more
person Flor
schedule February 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hello, it´s me again.
I´ve found out that i forgot to tell you that i Sesshomaru haven´t realy seen his child.
I would like to know what he thought, after all, he hasten seen his child´s born.