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August 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
intresting i hope the monk gets killed by inyuasha this should be fun
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March 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this was ok. the text is alittle confusing. when someone is speeking, pleasa use quotation marks("lalala")
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February 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i never thought that miroku could do that but keep going
i want to knoe what is inuyasha going to do
i want to knoe what is inuyasha going to do
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January 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was simply awful.
You need some serious grammatical help and a much better plot.
You need some serious grammatical help and a much better plot.
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December 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
It was terrrible.
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September 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay, you need to be slapped. That was just awful.
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September 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I've got to go with the previous reviewer. I couldn'll wll who was talking and who wasn't. Please get a beta reader before putting stuff like this up there, especially if its a "Sue" character (Everyone wants a peice of Sue, even Inuyasha, which I find very hard to believe. Sue characters are fine, but they get irratating when they push their way through to where She's the smartest, prettiest girl out there and everyone wants a peice of her and she knows it)
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September 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You need some real help in this. Seriously. They don't say stuff like boob. when you write a fic you gotta get into the speech of the day. I mean, saying ass is ok, its sounded good in the other Inu fics I've read. Boob just kinda threw me off, and the grammar needs work. It would be a wonderful story if you gave it a bit of a rewrite. Get more into it, get a little more descriptive. read some of the highly rated inu stories to see what I mean about talking. Otherwise, nice.