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for Temptation's a bitch

by shortybynature04

person None Of Your Business
schedule July 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Omg! You have to write more. I was sitting here reading and when I came to the end I was like what the fuck why did you have to stop. PLEASE!! WRITE MORE ASAP!!!
person mysterious1
schedule May 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
stupid
person freakna43
schedule September 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
yo it's ight just improve
person lana
schedule August 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
how can i start ummm well it was good but u shouldnt have stoped rite there and then u cou7ld have made it long but it still was good
person Hillary
schedule August 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
cute but too short
person Mija
schedule August 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
well it was a short chap but hey it was a bit funny how Inu all of a sudden went Miroku on Kagome, hehe I cant wait to read more so I hope you update soon, would like to see where you go with this, much huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
person essie
schedule August 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
this is starting out to be a great fanfic but it was to short please update soon
person MyOwnHappyEnding
schedule August 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
How about slowing it down some? Describe it like you were watching them, or maybe one of the two. Be realistic. Don't try to rush everything together for a chapter. And you might want to hold back on updating until you get more than one page. Let's see, what else... Cliffhangers are the best! So you're on the right track...um...*thinks hard* Well... I hope this helps...if anything is wrong or screwed up...sorry... I'm not really sober right now ^_~
person Wild orchid
schedule August 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This site is going into the toilet if writers like you keep posting. THIS IS AN ADULT SITE!!! Stop wasting space with your crap. Chapters are supposed to be longer than 1 paragraph.
schedule August 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
LOL. Sit boy! I like it. Short and yummy.

Sinfully Yours,
DM