rate_review Reviews

wow! I'm really really enjoying your story! Lately I've been skimming through some fan fictions, and I think on a livejournal community someone reccomended this story, soI thought, hey why not? Although I'm not very fond of AU InuYasha storys, just as a personal prefrence I guess, but your story is so great! You keep the story line moving, and the detail of your characters is so close to the originals. Mostly when I read an AU fiction, its like they only keep the name ofthe character, and everything else has changed, but not in your story!
I'm not here to criticise (oh gods I cant spell) you, so I'll tell you which parts I'm liking so far. I like how you mention Inu's car, and how its red, then later on how Kagome gets a red dress, I get so caught up in reading I don't notice that red is his favorite color, until it's mentioned, so that allows me to think back, which in tun, keeps me interested. I also liked how you let the relationship grow between InuYasha and Kagome before anything inimate happened. So many times I read a story, where they first met, and one chapter later, they've already done it. If that happened in every day life (even though, as we both know, this isnt everyday life), then we would all be whores. haha. Anyways.
I am very much anticipating your next chapter, so while I wait, I'm going read over which parts I may have missed (I kept getting interrupted by phone calls). Thank you very much for sharing your creativity with me and for being such a wonderful writer!

Faye

URKK!! I HATE YOU!! LOL!! YOU MADE THIS S SOO SOO GOOOD!! >___________< Your writing skills is magnificent i juss have to say that juss to get that anger out of my body! hahahhas anywayss love the plot and the way your story is in placee. I hope you have lemons in the near chapter cuzz it would make me happy loll Hmm..... i wonder what happen to Kikyou after Inuyasha found out she's cheating on him. Would she try to win him back? LOL Though no offence or anything i "hate" kikyou...anywayssss more chapters pleaseee!

Hey girl! Its been awhile since you updated and I was thinking, you know, that maybe YOU SHOULD!!! You can't just leave me hanging here when they FINALLY get together!! How cruel can you be? Please! please! please! I'm begging you PLEASE update!!!!!

Okay, I have been waiting patiently for you to update, and I am dying now!!!!!! Must update...or say...I die! *cough hag!* Ooo...candy... ((BTW: Great story, I absolutely love it!!!))

it is a really good story so plz update soon. I love it so far!!!!!!

R: "Are ya portuguese?"

Z: "Where the hell would you insinuate that from? You haven't got a clue!"

R: "Are you Cree?"

Z: "An Indian?!"

R: "Are you Portu-Cree?"

Z: *Stabs Ray in the eye with a pencil* "Shuddap!"

R: "What's this gunk?"

Z: "Never mind. We honestly admire your writing and grammer skills. Most people would just write 'dey rub eachodder, den dey f***! The END!' You have some of the best writing skills that I know of."

R: "I think this stuff ain't good for my cold. I'm missing some lovin' here! Inu!!! Kag!!!! how beautiful!"

Z: "We've been missing you! I'm praying for the evil s tos to go away, for both you and Ray. Moreso you because she's trying to get me sick."

R: "I just don't want to be lonely, tis all..."

Z: "You just like to torture me."

R: "Moo!!! *turns away* So, are ya Slovenian!?"

*BANG!*

Z: "Sleep is good for your body anyways."

R *swirly-eyed on ground* "But I don't wanna go to school today. I wanna stay here and bake cookies with you!"

Z: "Let us pray."

"We miss you and still wait for the next chapter. Although we didn't get cliffed, we feel you've only toasted one side of the bagel (How are you suppose to make those anyways?) Au Revoir for next time!"

you better continue with this story or I'll be sooo mad

update soon! I really like it!

This story totally rocks! Don't let other people put you down saying your grammar is bad. English is my native tongue, and you are writing this story wonderfully. If you ever need help on some of the grammar, e-mail me. I hope you get better soon, and keep up the great work! <33333 *huggles*

nice chappie as usual. keep updating