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I don't remember if I reviewed earlier under Hanyou Slave or Snowfall. Anyways, how could you think that the whole scene with the rumor mill bitches sucked?! Personally, I loved it. I loved the youkai change in him. That was sweet that you set Ako up with Shippnd Ind I'm glad to know that there was a loophole to the whole mating vs sex thing. OMG. Love the shower! But, I must say *snicker*, it can be as big as ever, but if a man doesn't learn how to use it right, it's worthless. Right girls? I sure hope Kagura brightens up soon. You make me feel so sorry for her. Good strategy! I loved the whole Inu/Kag deal and how you've painted them as adults and parents. I'm glad they are "rabbits". Thanks for explaining what a tai-youkai is. Now I'll know how to use it. Chapters seven and eight were just great fun. I'm on to chappie nine!

Totally awesome! I love how you ended it. Believe me it can and does happen--three in a row. I wish that the people who believe it's impossible could experience it at least once. Great chappie!

Hey Zelix. Ionlyonly gotten to read the first chapter. I like the way the story is going. I noticed that you do a lot of passive "telling" of the story in this first chapter. I love the story line and can't wait til I get time to read more. You really get into Kagura's head and make her a well rounded character at the very beginning, something I'm afraid I don't do very well. I hope to learn from you how to better do that and balance my stories a bit better. I'm such an adrenaline junkie though that I enjoy more of the story played out as events happen, but then again, that's just me. Flashbacks are one way to do it or simply a timeline of action. Thought maybe you might want to consider trying that approach at your next writing session if you would like to add that kind of tempo to your stories. Use my stories as an example since you really like them. (Kag's Blood under pen name Snowfall and Sketches under Hanyou Slave). Don't mean to offend, just trying to return the favor. If you have any specific suggestions for my writing, I would love to hear them. That isn't done in reviews very often. Hope this helps and satisfies you as a review. E-mail me and let me know what you think about this review. Keep up the good work. BTW, is the character Zelix from Star Trek?

OMG! Did I speak to soon or what?! My heart just about popped out of my chest at chapter two and I'm on my way back for thirds. Whew!!!!

Chapter 3: Truly Amazing! I cannot be completely certain of Arc's parentage, but his speed and agility, oh my! Oh, and the clawed hand. His sensual dominating animal instincts are so, should I say, arousing? You know me, the adrenaline junkie. You've made me so happy! *squeals*

You have painted an excellent tragic figure of Kagura. I clap my hands at your skill and inventiveness. Her hysteria was heartbreaking. But to be comforted as Arc was able to do..'t a't all women wish for that in the depths of despair. I'm outta here for fourths!

Chapter 4: Aaaah, now we get to the fun. You made me laugh. Yeah! Things are speeding along nicely. Can't wait to read the "talk". But alas, no more tonight. I'm so excited.

Man that was wonderful!!
= Soul Calmer = what a beautiful thing... I liked that!
Good work Friend!

*thwaps Zelix* BAD! No leaving it off there! I want more, damnit! Like a hot love scene, and a happy ending *nods and menaces the author some more* And it better be snappy... so hurry up! *flutters off to wait VERY impatiently*

It's a guy-thing right - comparing sizes like that?? *lol*
Anyways - good chappie!