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extremly fantastic ass kiking story (sorry but i really suc at spelling) anyway this has been one of the best fanfiction story ive ever read! im gonna go chek out the sequel so aneway keep it up.cyas

wow....damn That chappie was sooooo cool, i never said this but it totally rocked!!!!! I love ur story!!!

Great story!! I was very impressed with the level of detail you put into it. I hope to see more of your other works soon. They are excellent as well.

Pretty lame. Your grammar needs improvement, as does your punctuation, and your OC just feels... blah.

You have a really origional idea here, and I love it. There are some major style isssues though. Tense. It's extremely difficult to write a story in present tense, but we speak in the present tense often enough that it slips in. Read over a few times to weed out the present tense. It will do a lot to improve the flow of your story. One more thing that nagged at me while reading, chatty words in the prose. There's no reason you need to trail off and then begin again with things like, "anyway," I really want to stress that I think this story is good, but could be so much better with a little bit of stylistic help. The one-shot format is something I love, and I'm glad to see how well it has suited this story. Although I did have one idea; breaking the intoduction off and making a separate story about the war that drove Kagura out of the sengoku period. Really, that could be it's own story. Rather than saying that it wasn't recorded in history books, try to relate it to one of the many territorial wars that were raging at the time. A bit of reasearch could add a lot. Please don't be too sensitive and know that I offer this criticisim with the sincierest of intent. I'd love to see this story polished up, it would truly shine.

You were right. Very original. I never thought of Kagura as that kind of person but after reading the story I can see it fitting in with everthing. I will continue to read your stories and reveiwing. Thanxs for letting me know about the fics. I do have one question though, did you give their son Kagome's last name because Inuyasha didn't have one in the T.V. series? Anyway let me know please you have my email. And great job with the lemons, you live up to the hype.

Hi! Wow, I really enjoyed this! I adore Kagura so much and I can't wait to read the sequel...(btw I added your story to my recommended list, thanks for the help!) And I will add this one too! I don't usually like OC...unless they are completely necessary or have a minor role...but I adored Arc...and for me to have loved this pairing so much is very unusual, I love the Kagura/Sessho pairing, but this was just wonderful and right, and the lemon scenes were great! In case you want to keep reading my story, chap 4 is up, and I will make it a custom to your story before running to work :) Keep it up! Hugs!

actually it's the new moon, not the full moon. but it's still a good story. you totally blew me away with kagome and inuyasha being his parents.

This was really good. Actually, your original character is a very good one, not like others I've seen... very well done!

I thihat hat Loneliness of the Free Wind is one of the very best fics that I have read in a long time, aside from a few grammar errors, I see absolutely nothing wrong with it.