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by badkittie

person LadyCatBailey
schedule May 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*mouth drops, whimpers pathetically* Onna, that was evil. I was SO sure we were gonna get a least some lime...*sobs like only a echii obsessed hentai denied her perversions can* LOL And that, m'dear, was me being the little prevert that I am (Or as my friend says "porvert"...like PRO...ya know? Bein' a pro at being a prevert? hehehe...eheh...heh...*cough* Nevermind), and whining because there was no lemon. Which I will do loudly at every chance I get till someone shoves me in a corner with a lemon. at which point I"m curled in said corner for a good three hours drooling and goign "Mou...he growled...is hot in here or is it just me?"

Yeah, I have no life...so just ignore everything I write, its not worth the read. lmao

Ugh. Kikyou made her apperance. Would anyone mind if I used her for a dart board? *grumbles and glares at her, 'accidently' shoving her off a cliff on to jagged, pointy rocks* Oh jee, lookie at that...Whoopsies, I slipped! *hums and edges away...only after 'accidently' shoving Kagome on INuYasha...hehehe...* Oh Gods. I seriously have got to stop staying awake after midnight. No, I just seriously have to get a life and stop obsessing over Kag/Inu's love-life 'cause I don't have one....LOL

Yeah, short and random smut is always fun. Makes you feel very hentai. In a good way! ^_^ Yes, just call me a female Miroku...why? Because I am. Or even better-A female InuYasha. You know he's a little prt irt in his mind. You just know it. Fifty years stuck too a freaking tree, anyone would be after THAT. Or maybe thats just me? Anywaysybe ybe I'm the only one, but I'm positive he takes a sick delight in having Kagome ride his back. *leer* Hell, I'D get a sick delight from riding his back...

Meanwhile, I enjoyed this chapter. Naraku, that greesy little git. He's so much fun...I just wanna beat him down. You know, I bet I could make him cry in five.three seconds flat. SeriousI'mI'm just evil like that. How much fun would that be? "CRY BITCH BOY, CRY! MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!" o.O I'm deranged.

No panties? I feel bad for poor Kago. I mean...no panties...skirt...eeep. that just *Wouldn't* happen. I'd wear 'em. But take 'em off before I went to see him under the bleachers. 'Cuase I'm smart like that. Or, you know, just cruisin' to get my ass in trouble. Which ever works. *shrugs*

Well, I shall hush my ramblings with this: I am lovign your story (Jee, who didn't see that coming?), once again, wonderfully written, beautifully developed plot, the smut is seriously shaping up to be just FAB. *once agwavewaves Pocky in tempting manner* Will become slave if Yasha does bad, naughty, kinky things to Kagome under the bleachers. Right near Hojo. *leers* So good. MmmmmYasha....bleachers....Yasha...*eyes glaze over*

Much Love,
Cat
person Tammy
schedule May 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, well I like it so much I just had to come review again....just for effing kicks. I'm kind of obsessive about my fanfiction like that. I LOVE your Inuyasha. Love him. I have a question though....did he have any help taking those incriminatihotohotos or did he manage that solo? Also, I guess I just wonder alot about Yash in general in this fic....like the leather room. Was it all leather or did I misread? I mean, whose teenage son has a dungeon room. If he has parents and they don't know he has it, why don't they know. Who's punchin' this boy's clock? Is he dealing drugs-I know he had some in the envelope, but The author's notes only seem to mention nara's crew dealing...? And I'd die to get more os POs POV- what is his motovation with Kags? He has to see what an innocent individual she is. What he is doing is traumatising.....I don't want him to stop *cough* *cause I'm a Hentai freak* ....but I would like more insight as to what he feels that makes this stimulating for him.

Now I know that you don't have time to answer all of these freakin' question, and I don't expect you to pander to my curious George brain anyway...but I thought as far as reviewing goes, that it would show my LOVE for the work as well as maybe help out constructively if I throw my questions at you. So if it was good, give me a cookie...If not, you are more than welcome to tell me to shut my fat mouth. I'll even leave you my email!#@$%*Smi*Smiles* Either way, just belive me, the story is hella entertaining.
person WolfBite
schedule May 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey this is good!!!!! I hope you add more soon. I wr ifr if Kagome will wear the mini skirt. What will Inuyasha do? Will actually love her eventually? So many questions that can only be answered by you writing. Well g2g. Later - WolfBite ^_^
schedule May 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
O.o! WOW! Inuyasha is being pretty petty towards Kagome...But whoa! What is u tha that half-demon's brain? And Kagome...I wonder how she is going to deal with what he did to her...Until next time! ^_^
person InuYoukaiOtaku
schedule May 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hi its me-again! great chapter! *gives a high five to the kikyo hater* bahaha -^_^-

this morning i was gonna read it, but i just didn't have time before i had to leave, but i did see your comment from me *pats your happy head fool of comments* ^_^ cant wait until you post again, and oh! dont worry about the AFF problems >_< I'm always having problems. If you've ever read Teenage Life..its mine and I'm always having problems
person shaid
schedule May 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ues oes only once a week? ::whines:: I can go on but damn it's gonna be hard. Good strong chapter. I like it... and since I love kink, I can't wait for more! :-D Keep up the good work!
person Numisma
schedule May 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
it's very interesting, but i think you could use a beta reader. also, there are some spots, one specifically in particular that stands out, where there's no segue when it's actually needed. i'm talking about in chapter 3 when it goes from Kagome being chained against the wall to having Inuyasha standing behind her and stuff. um, i was given the impression that in that particular action, she either must have been released and been standing freely, or that she was actually cuffed to like, one of those x-shaped racks, or something, when he came up behind her and she could feel his erection pressing against her.

trust me, i will continue reading this fic, but you could use a lil work. in addition to what i mentioned, please make the readers a bit more aware of the surroundings.
person truelove
schedule May 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Don't we all just love a bad boy? ;).
person Nina
schedule May 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story. I just love it. I think it's totally sexy that Inu's going to make Kag do naughty shit. How fun and original. I would have reviewed sooner, but AFF never lets me in either.
person Liz
schedule May 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Yeah! Another update! WOO! lol. Another grchapchappie! Yeah i'll be trying to log in and stuff and i'll get this "Warning: mysql_connect(): Too many connections in /home/adultfanfiction.net/html/aff/base/classes/dbal.class.php on line 11 Couldn't connect to database server." It sucks. Well.. if you can please email meh again when you update. Great job. Very interesting story. *Was looking for a Inu/Kag lemon* lol... heh heh.... *grins*

With Much Love
Huggles
~Liz~