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*giggles* I have suceeded! Mental images beware!

Tee hee! Another good chapter, and filled with so much sexual tension 'I' was getting all fluttery. The way you described Inu's kisses and gentle licks was just...*melts into a puddle of hentai goo*...brilliant! I adored this chapter, the balance of romance and innocence is superb. Once again, beautiful chapter I'm curious to see what happens next.

Mystic~me

**GRRR!! Just a notice to everyone: if you reveiw a story, hit submit, and end up with a screen that says "Too many connections, blah, blah, blah, that means your review did not post!! This is like the third time!!**
Back to business here...

Hello love!
I read the first chapter a few days ago while I was working overnight at my store, and I...well I got in trouble. But I will be honest and tell you, it was more than worth it! You've got such a wonderful story going here!
First off, you created a great scenario. I've read other fics where she does in fact get pulled down, and even has our hanyou landing on top of her, with nothing more than the wind knocked out of her.
Of course I always wondered, if he can leave a body impression in the ground, wouldn't she get hurt?
Needless to say, you've given a great account of what would happen. It was realistic, and most of all, the reactions were totally in character. And that, my friend, is not an easy feat.
You've done a wonderful job here. There's the emotional turmoil, the inner dialogue, the overwhelming guillt. It's all incredibly desciptive, so much, that you induced a lot of watery eyes (you guys know you wanted to cry too!!)
Anywho, the second round of praise concerns your structure. I am floored by your ability to pace this story. I've often mentioned in my own fics that my big problem is not keeping things steady, not to rush the plot. You have the uncanny sense to draw things out perfectly, keeping the reader hanging on every word, living it as you tell it. Bravo to you!
And the last thing...well anyone here who knows me knows one thing...
Sabichan LOVES sexual tension!!
I mean really, there is nothing quite like it. That edge of your seat feeling, wondering, hoping that this will be it, that it's really going to happen. It's electric, it's consuming, and I got in trouble again reading this because I couldn't tear my eyes away from the screen.
I dub you the queen of sexual tension, my dear! You've got a handle on it like nothing I've ever seen!
Mix this with your patient writing, and BAM! You've got me hooked!
(sorry I tend to ramble)
I'm just loving this fic so much. To be honest, I hope this doesn't end too soon, because it's so addictive! I don't know what I'll do when it's gone!
But honestly, you've done a wonderful job. I'm so happy to have clicked on this fic. Can't wait for the next chapter, I'll review again...though I'll try not to ramble so much next time.
Thank you so much for writing!
Ja ne!
~Sabichan~

ps, I'm loving the take on the healing part. It's very symbolic, very thoughtful. Even more so, can't wait to see what else it may lead to... =P

your story is great and sweet!
please keep writing!
pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!
and inuyasha has to keep suckling kagome....
that was a very cute and romatic idea
just imagine this picture....hmmmmmmmmmmmmm

Inuyasha was so so so so sweet to Kagome. Even though it's
mainly Inu's fault that Kagome got hurt, it's still sweet to have
Inu do that.

You know. I really think the show should have more moments
of Inuyasha and Kagome. More cuddling, more of everything
the show doesn't let us see. That would be nice. Also, I think
that the show should have a two part episode just like this story.
If that happened, it'd be soooo kawaii. :-)

This story is on another site? I didn't know.....*pouts*
But since I love this story and I also love to review, I'll wait
like a good girl for future chapters. ^.^

I take it the Lemon is next Chapter as well.^_^ Oh could you please reveiw my fic Redemption that I cowrote with my Husband as I have had no reveiws for the parts I wrote even though me and my husband had pointed out it is cowritten.(Sigh)

Forgot to give our pen name which is Rommel17.

Still reading, still enjoying! The description in this chapter was great! I love the licking, it's intimate, sensual and gives a great opening for any direction you want to take the story. How long were you planning to make this again? For some reason I'm under the impression this is a short story, is that right?

Guess what? You're stuck with me now! HAHA! This story's just too good, I can't pry myself away from it. And that last chapter...ooh la la, ca commence a etre chaud! Phew! *fanning self* Keep up the outstanding work as usual!

So emotional... I like it a lot... :o)

Your latest chapter is *so* ang! ng! Others have commented on the sexual tension and atmosphere that comes through in your words...and I will be no different. Your description of Inuyasha's tender care of Kagome's wounds just had me melting...melting...melting in the most pleasant way. The attraction between the two is almost palpable but it's tempered with deep feelings that go beyond simple lust.

To echo others, I too love the pace of your story. Many others -especially on this site- are so quick to rush the emotional responses in favor of the physical. I'm not complaining -after all this is a site devoted to more hentai ideas :) But I appreciate that you are giving the characters a chance to feel and think through what is happening. But it all balances so well the the physicial. Did I mention that you had me melting with that last chapter? :)

I think you've mentioned in your author notes that this is part of another ongoing story you have on another site? Or am I wrong about that...at any rate, lov love to read more of your work.