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for you lucky dogs

by arina

person Whiskas
schedule May 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ok i guess it was ok but there where quite a few of grammar erros, and it sorta seemed to shoot through rather quickly in dialouge wise like at one point it would be at a certain point but then just automatically jump from something completely off topic. and you really didn't do a good job of describing the scenes or the characters' states.