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July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
tongue isnt a hard word to spell ya know
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July 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Two words- spell check.
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May 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
thanks for all the reveiws. I have edited the story to youre specific problems thyou you and hope you'll continue to read it
schedule
May 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
thanks for all the reveiws. I have edited the story to youre specific problems thank you and hope you'll continue to read it
schedule
May 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
thanks for all the reveiws. I have edited the story to youre specific problems thank you and hope you'll continue to read it
schedule
May 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I will not be gentle. I was going to read further chapters in this piece, but somethitopptopped me. Lack of paragraphs. No offence, go back and edit this. Put in some paragraphs. This isn't a short piece you're doing, without these simple divisions a person can get jumbled up. Lord knows I did!
Don't worry, it was an otherwise okay work. Just I kind of a have a thing against no paragraphs.
Don't worry, it was an otherwise okay work. Just I kind of a have a thing against no paragraphs.
schedule
May 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
you guys will have to wiat for the next chapters because I'm still working on them. sorry. oh and thanks for all the reveiws it has really helped alot.
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May 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
well this is one of my first stories so on the later chapters I will try to beef it up ok :D
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May 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hey, not to bad for first fic. use spell check and find another word for "nibble"
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May 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I'm editing my chapters as we speack so if you have requests to make the chapters better don't hesitate to tell me