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wow... i must say this is quite an AU story.

finish okay?

I'm not quite sure what you mean by exhausting >.> I try to give an exciting story that has depth in it, lots of characterisations, originally I only wanted 5-6 chapters in it but then found parts of the story interesting and decided to let it follow it's own course. The next chapter is going to start closing alot of lose ends in the story and wind it towards it's end.

Thanks for the insight, I'll try to keep in mind what you said but if you could make it a bit cleare that wouls help also. I spend a lot of time and effort to give a great chapter and research alot of the details I put into it, so does my beta when she reads the chapters. I've often scrapped whole chapters because they weren't at the same standard as my other ones. I find also that alot of my chapters reflect what mood I'm in when I write them so maybe that's why they seem exhausting since my life is kinda exhausting lately ;p Thanks for the review!

ok, i was quite fascinated by your story, and have been reading it straight for and hour or two, if not longer, and have wuite enjoyed it. it certainley is a new twist. i liked what you have done with sesh and rin, and i like the concealing spell, and i like that souta is older, and.....well, bassically everything. i really liked the line you had for the irn/sesh lemon "milking him for everything he was worth" THAT is a great line! i really dislike stories that go on and on, with some excitment, but bcause the author is trying to conceal what i is going to happen, it just keeps twisting itself around and around again. now i have no idea if you are rying to conceal what is ging to happen next, or not, and im not even saying htat your story is like that too much, but i think that it is like that enough, that i have been reading it, and am now tired of it. i cant wait to read more and cant wait to find out what happens, but im jst utterly exhausted of yur stry. now im not even sure if there is anything you can do about it, nor do i know if you would do anytihng about it, and im not saying you have to, or even that you should, im just voicing my opinion, because i can, and becaue i want to, but htat doesnt mean anything. i still really like your story. maybe i jsut need a break. yikes, i hope this review isn't all over the place. i mean well.

Please update!!! This is turning out to be such a great story. I hope your muse is with you. Happy Turkey Day and I'll keep checking for updates =)

Please Update this story has been second to none. Ciao~

i have never liked an AU fic, but this one was REALLY good and i hope you post soon! I love this fic!

Damn, but I love this story. But I can't stand the suspense. Update as soon as you can. I gotta see what happens next.

Ok i love this story!! it is awsome!!! i cant wait for the next update. So please update again soon.

.........................That was the sound of me being speachless at the awesomeness of your sotory. I think it was you who had the mailing list with updates on it. If it was you I would verry much like to be on it. I don't know if it is posted next to this comment, if it isn't my e-mail is lily (underslash) bily (underslash) 2004@hotmail.com. Please keep writing, and please update soon. It is pure tourture on readers to read a wonderful story such as yours only to be left in want of an ending. Again please update soon! I GREATLY, GREATLY, GREATLY, anticipate your next chapter.


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~Please update!!! It's getting sooooo good. =)