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Poor Makoto. I was afraid that somthing like that was going to happen. How will Inuyasha and Kagome going to
react to the news. Will Muchi survive the wrath of Inuyasha? How will inc incident effect Rin and Sess. This will bring back
old memory I know they would like to forget. Please update very soon.

Wow, deep. I can believe you started the story in which the reader get all warm and fuzzy, then all of a sudden,
BAM! All hell broke lose on Makoto. I was so proud of her when she faught back.ust ust was disgusted when Muchi
filled her head with nonsense about the village would hate her and will hunt her down. He madelooklook like it was
her fault. But if the villagers have half a brain they would know that Ma's 's character and realize that she would never
do something that gruesome. I guess the villagers will believe their own instead of a demon. By Makoto going to
Sess and staying with him will this put a strain on Inuyasha and Sess new found relationship? Inuyasha will feel threaten
that Sess is taking care of his daughter instead of him. He might see himself as failure for not protecting his daughter. Will this
also put a strain on Rin and Sess as well? Will the truth of Rin's life before she mated with Sess be relieve to Saraku?? I know
I have alot of questions; I just hope that it will be answered in later chapters. Update soon ^_^.

I love this story, okay was mad that you let him attack her(just becasue I like the story so much) glad he got some of what he deserved. Can't wait until nehap!hap!!!
and your doing a great job, write what you want. Hard to find a story that grips you and takes you up and down.!

MORE!!!

Bad at expression tonight. Loved waht you wrote, though. MORE!!!!!

All right, Saraku! Way to empower your Makoto! It's good that she's leaving IY's family with a favorable impression; I'm sure they'll all need each other later on.

my only complaint, wished chap was longer and even more interaction between the girls. mildly upset it's about to turn dark, but well, I guess you must, I'm sure your writing will be good and that is all that matters. Did I tell you already that I love your concept?

I know, I know...I skipped last chapter's review. I actually just read it tonight along with six because I've been so busy. I thought what you did with Yoshimi was very interesting, and I am curious to see where her character goes from here. I also liked what you did with Makato though I am still curious about her. I assume her passive behavior was nature versus nurture to a degree, but were there any factors or events that drove her further into that role?

Oh, and the more I read this story the more I am reminded of a book I have read that you might want to check out. The first is "Ender's World" by Orson Scott Card, and there are other books set in the same reality if you like that one. It is science fiction, and the primary characters are gifted children in an extreme setting--very psychological.

I look forward to the next chapter!

I'm intrigued to see this story go darker. Your first installment began incredibly dark and lessened as it neared its end. In this story you have kept it fairly light with even the more intense scenes (like the broken leg or Muchi encounters) staying away from the levels reached during Rin's torture, rape and deaths. So now that we are all settled into a warm happy place you are going rip that all away from us and make the characters suffer once more? Brilliant! Not that I like to see the characters suffer, I just know your writing and I trust your angst-infused story telling skills to really kick things up a few notches when it was already going really well.

Yep, really liked this chapter. Keep 'em coming!

....and you were going to skip all this good stuff in this chapter? Im glad you wrote it!! Keep going and update very very very soon, ok. Ill be waiting and looking for your fic!!!