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I saw that this story was completed and decided to read it and now I'm glad I did, although I haven't read it completely yet (I'm still in the process of doing so) I'm usually just a fan of Sessh/Kagome but I've always thought Youko was as hot as Sessh. There are a few things I'm confused about. When they defeated Naraku, wasn't the jewel completed (as in 1 piece?) when Kagome gave it to Inu to wish on? I'm pretty sure that's what it said, and that it then mentioned that the jewel returned to Kagome's body and gave her a new soul. So, how was it that Kagome was able to give jewel shards to Sessh and the rest of them to go through the well to get Miroku? While I'm enjoying this & I like the Kagome/Kurama pairing and I like the idea of Sango getting together with Heie, I have to admit that I hope you don't pair Sessh with anyone (especially Shizuru). I guess it's because of my love of Sessh/Kagome FF that I don't like to think of him being paired with anyone but her. The other thing I'm curious about is, how was Kikyo able to bring Naraku back to life and why would she want to? I also can't figure out how Naraku's supposed to be even more powerful now when in the past he was only as strong as he was because he had the jewel (shards & then entire jewel)??

Okay I just finished reading this and there is some major stuff missing. In the chapter before the last 1, they were all still in the middle of the battle with Naraku and then in the last chapter the battle was over and Koenma was putting 'the mirror' away in the vault. Since the end of the battle is missing I can only guess that Naraku was pulled into Kanna's mirror.

I love this story/fic you did a great job on it...

You really need to go over this with a spell checker. Not only do I see double words like "She alrea kne knew Yusuke" like that.. I also see JUMBLED words. Like... You were trying to spell it and it just fucked up. Like "Interested" came out "hntednted" When hiei was wanting to see Shippo for the first time. Re-read over your story. I'm sure you'll be surprised at the mistakes made that are easily fixed.

I liked the idea but to be honest there were TONS of grammer and spelling errors. Not to mention the story kind of went of topic a few times. And the action wasn't to very graphic. I suggest that in the future you get the help of a very skilled beta. Though you don't need to take the advice I just suggest it. If you are smart than you will think about it.

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

This story is sooo cool. Email me when you write your sequel. PLEASE?!?! Write it soon.

it's "Kazuma", not Kuzuma.

i love your story and i saw that you havent updated in a year or so but are you going to update soon? i hope so a great author like you could have a future at this. well i hope you update and keep writing! ^^
~DemonKittyForever~

Asome story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!