rate_review Reviews

nice going.
but
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to short!

and when is the action going to go on?

The story is going great keep going!!!!!!!!!!!!
and of course UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!!!

cha5

Aiya, I need a LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOONG chapter next!!! Because I wanna see MORE Sess/Rin!!!XD
Anyway, this cha is very well done!!!! What's the secret on Shikonotama, I'm curious!:)

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So far I am enjoying your story, even though I've only read the first chapter. The plot is one of the most original that I have read in quite a while. I do have a few suggestions though. The main one is to get someone to beta read for you to assist with grammar. You have a lot of tense agreement problems, sentence fragments and punctuation errors. If these things are fixed then you would have a truly great story. One pointer I have is to look at the way that published authors write as a model to improve your writing.

If you would like to talk more about your writing please feel free to e-mail me.

utsukushii

P.S. I've only read the first chapter, so if you've changed this stuff disregard the writing pointers.

I;m still loving it!!!!!! more chapters soon please...

I still find your fic original and interesting. You do have a problem with yverbverb tenses, though, which makes reading your story a little difficult. I've still got the basic gist of the story, though. What will you put the crew through next?

Great chapter. I hope that you will update soon.

As you hope, I like the chapter TOO much!!!:)
More!!! Sess/Rin= the BEST!!!

I saw the capture coming, but I did not expect Sess surrending to the guard? Is he
falling for Rin and does not realize it. Please update soon.