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August 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow wtf?
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August 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
don't know what the hell is going on but I like it so update soon.
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January 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
No offense or anything; I am about to give you some very constructive criticism. You ready?
Something is wrong with this story. Correction: someTHINGS.
1) Typos. Hate em'; they make a fic hard to read. Get spellcheck or an editor.
2) This plot is moving to fast. It was all find and dandy when he kidnapped her at the VERY beginning, and even sort of amusing when he said u r mommy. But then, later that night, she just wakes up and starts to kiss him, deciding to play along? Not that her playing along is a bad idea if she wants to know what is going on, but the kiss came before her decision to do that. So I am sure that there are people out there who read that and wondered about it, just as I did.
3) What the hell is going on? The summary says that Sesshoumaru kidnaps her and InuYasha has to decide if he loves her or not. So what- does Sesshy love her himself? And if that is the case, then why did he have to try to fool her? I mean, I think she might know that he kidnapped her...
All in all, your fic needs a little bit of work. I might be keeping up with this though, to see how it turns out. Do your best!
I am rooting for you and this story's success, so don't be fooled by my harsh words. The plot rather intrigues me. Feel free to email me if you would like to reply, because maybe it's just me ot understanding... possibly, because I am often confused about the simplest things which I overanalyze. So then, yes, if you please, be a darling and write me back? Thanks a bunch!
~~Kioki
Something is wrong with this story. Correction: someTHINGS.
1) Typos. Hate em'; they make a fic hard to read. Get spellcheck or an editor.
2) This plot is moving to fast. It was all find and dandy when he kidnapped her at the VERY beginning, and even sort of amusing when he said u r mommy. But then, later that night, she just wakes up and starts to kiss him, deciding to play along? Not that her playing along is a bad idea if she wants to know what is going on, but the kiss came before her decision to do that. So I am sure that there are people out there who read that and wondered about it, just as I did.
3) What the hell is going on? The summary says that Sesshoumaru kidnaps her and InuYasha has to decide if he loves her or not. So what- does Sesshy love her himself? And if that is the case, then why did he have to try to fool her? I mean, I think she might know that he kidnapped her...
All in all, your fic needs a little bit of work. I might be keeping up with this though, to see how it turns out. Do your best!
I am rooting for you and this story's success, so don't be fooled by my harsh words. The plot rather intrigues me. Feel free to email me if you would like to reply, because maybe it's just me ot understanding... possibly, because I am often confused about the simplest things which I overanalyze. So then, yes, if you please, be a darling and write me back? Thanks a bunch!
~~Kioki
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April 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OMG, that was so good. You just have to have Inuyasha come for her. I have seen to many sesshomaru/kagome ones. anyway, ill love whatever you do with this story. ^^ please write another chapter. Im dieing to know what happens
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April 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay i know that i have already reviewed. but i read the review's on this story and i have something to say. Anon if anyone sucks that would be YOU, and little john of locksland i dont know if you write but i'de love to know what name you go by on this site, i would LOVE read some of your work then diss you in a review. That would make my day. ^^ Okay im going to end this with a solem goodbye
ja ne
ja ne
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February 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
1 thing !!more plez!!
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February 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
1 thing !!more plez!!
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January 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hey dude i like ur fic so far r u gonna continue or quit pleeeeeeeeeeeeease continue i need to see what happens or i shall slowly go insane, JA NE
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December 29, 2003 at 12:00 AM
i want more put 2 up soon i'll find yea i got a shotgun *ch ch* and i'm ready to shot *bang* u better run gurl/boy or hurry with the chp!@_@