rate_review Reviews

Mmmmmm. Made me wet. Good job, love.

It's a little rushed... and besides, how did Kikyou combat the fact that her soul tries to leave her everytime she gets too close to Kagome?

Thats just wrong and gross in so many ways

Uum, good, but there were some mistakes... Like this:

The two were unaware that their moment of passion waing ing watched by someone a short distance away. Waing ing? Do you mean was being?
No prep on the anal!? OUCH! O.O
Kikyo peered through some bushes her brown eye...ect, ect. The word 'some' wasn't needed here. 'The' would have been just fine.
I love you and I'm not afraid to... Blah blah blah. WTF!? Inuyasha wouldn't say that. It would be more like just an 'I love you'.
Exposed core? WTF?
Her lover? More like one night stand.
Why the hell does Kagome own a strap?

Now, don't think of this as bashing, it's not! This was a great PWP type thing, I was just pointing out a few things that could have been changed! ^_^;;

hey that was sexi u should make a lot of thest

woah...that was interesting....

If this story is between Kikyou and Kagome tyhen it should be in the yuri section. I liked the story, but it was kinda. . . bleh as well. Original though I'll give you that, very original

this story creeped me out whilst i read it.....ah....the story is cool but it sure gave me the creeps..brrrrrrr

i liked the story. it was good. i haven't read a lesbo fic that was descriptive enough for me before.

Hey this story rocked!!It made want to fuck something^^j/k or maybe..*LOL* This fic was pretty cool. Keep it up.